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your fire
Contributed by
Lenore_Poe15
on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 12:50:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
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when I saw I was drawn to it
I tryed to hold it in my hand and keep the form
but like fire you shift and turn
burning my soul and still keeping me warm
it seemed the shock kept away the pain
but deep inside I was burning within your flame
I was drawn to it like a moth
I flew over and tryed to rest my tired wings
but when landed I did burn
but then I flew away and now it seems
I am left without the light and empty without warmth
or without the firey love
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2006-05-27 12:50:21]
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Re: your fire
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by ever1der on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 07:30:25 PM AEST
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| very visual..good job. |
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Re: your fire
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by AshRayne on
Saturday, 27th May 2006 @ 10:10:43 PM AEST
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good images. my creative writing teacher once said that images are the most important part of a poem.
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Re: your fire
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by Faust on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 10:34:36 PM AEST
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well done.
Eternally Punished,
Faust |
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