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Gateway
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 11:43:16 PM in AEST
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Like all poets, I have to find the source-
and like all humans, I sometimes fail.
Down the sands of time, sometimes seeking divine direction..
which at times I bissfully fail to carry out,
ending up once more at yet, another questionable verse;
stillborn allegories.. never to see the infant night
'Round and 'round I go as in some empty room,
thinking as ever, all the wonderful and timeless ideas
and with absurd yet amused irritation, I write;
bent studiously over keys and paper,
ever mindfull that night is coming down
while the sky smiles still, blandly overhead:
"set beautifully.." I think.. "set beautifully.."
And then a distant voice in the sky:
some far off gentle awakening behind the clouds,
a fine graffiti of raindrops on the mind;
nature's all-grand design
and I realize a bit startled,
the phenomonal epiphany:
A glorious gateway opening me beyond
the wordless moment - a triple-barred rainbow
to more and more ideas spreading over acres of sky,
welcoming me through...
and for me, that single, shining moment
is the only true thing in the world.
Laughing, half crying, I pass through the gate,
glorious in the knowledge of ALL my inspiriation..
not having any direction but sure.. and on my way.
WK 2006
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Man_On_High
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Re: Gateway
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 12:01:24 AM AEST
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I'm not sure what I can say about this that I have not already told you.
The source of your inspiration is a phenomenon - it must be thus
to incite the extraordinary writes you share. I always find your work to be
stellar, (this being no exception) and am continually inspired and
excited at how quickly you put thought to pen and paper. And I find it
impossible not to mention at this juncture, that the way in which you
choose to convey your thoughts and the words you utilize are
always compelling - to say the very least.
You are and shall remain King of the allegorical, prince of
wordsmiths and a poet in every sense of the word. I find it an
incredible honour that you choose to share it so freely with us.
Ever humbled am I.
~Breezy
(and all I said in the PM still holds true!) |
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Re: Gateway
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 12:31:09 AM AEST
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Dearest Billy~
A most remarkable special and unique poet you are. It's amazing how time after time you can always pen an outstanding write. That says alot. Truly talented and A Master Of All Poetic Verse. In a league of ur own Keefe. Shine on sweet guy.
much love and hugs from ur fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Gateway
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 12:52:49 AM AEST
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Well I was gonna say remarkable but it seems as tho some one beat me so I'll sa simply divine write.
huggs, big smiles,
emy |
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Re: Gateway
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by ThePhoenix on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 08:31:02 AM AEST
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| I am blown away. You are truly talented..I am moved, you are indeed in a league of your own. |
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Re: Gateway
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 09:14:06 AM AEST
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Great, great work Billy anything I was gonna say about this piece has been said before me.
One word... Excellent.
J. |
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Re: Gateway
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 10:52:39 AM AEST
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| great work Billy :) |
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Re: Gateway
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 24th May 2006 @ 05:49:14 PM AEST
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Ahh, now I like this. The first stanzas are a little wordy, but upon finishing I realized they need to be, as there is a lot of progression both spoken of and sensed from searching, casting about for lines, to finding the moment of light, which is done very well at the end of this piece. I like the italicized portions as well. All in all, this is a fine piece of work, sir, and quite relevant to all of us who know the cold-and-hot waveplay of inspiration.
Bravo.
Andrew |
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Re: Gateway
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by Tanmaya on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 05:54:53 AM AEST
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Exceptionally great!
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Re: Gateway
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by wizard on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 06:15:02 AM AEST
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its tough at times to find inspiration, though i think i may have found some in this. its great how you were able to convey your thought in this..
wiz |
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Re: Gateway
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 01:17:36 AM AEST
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For me, the plus point of this particular piece lies, which seems wholly appropriate, in its inspiration and in particular lines that grab at me (the lines, each, clarifying that inspiration and, at the same time, embedding an essense that is unique and appealing)... lines like these:
"ever mindfull that night is coming down
while the sky smiles still, blandly overhead"
"a fine graffiti of raindrops on the mind"
"and for me, that single, shining moment
is the only true thing in the world"
"not having any direction but sure.. and on my way."
Vladimir Nabokov once wrote/said, "The pages are still blank, but there is a miraculous feeling of the words being there, written in invisible ink and clamoring to become visible". I believe I know what he meant. And... (boldish again, I am for saying as much)... I believe this write of yours tells of the moment that you realize the words, invisible thought they may be, are there... waiting to be seen - which I happen to think is a fine, fine moment indeed!
Fabulous, Billy!
Always happy to stop by your page for a visit,
~Snemmy |
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