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Deeper in the Empty Shell of Everything
Contributed by
assassinatorgirl
on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 08:42:40 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Flakes of brain crumble out of my ear,
That's when I realize she's had a beer.
Dripping sinuses from eyelashes of steel,
Spray-painted skin is beginning to peel.
Real cells hiding under this mass of death,
Reaching and struggling to just take a breath.
Help me, help me, they scream all day,
Scraping my life, free and astray.
Bind them to chains and don't let them go,
Else I'll be infected by the hate they sew.
My bloody nails that seep into my liver,
Digging deep so they can reap every sliver.
My own enemy right inside myself,
Setting each organ on each specific shelf,
Labeling my pains and ordering my pieces,
Take apart the jigsaw and iron all the creases.
Here I am waiting in my fatal sanctuary,
Attempting to sleep but of sleep I am wary.
Nightmares decorate my impressionable thoughts,
Patterns so beautiful, I'm tangled and caught.
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assassinatorgirl
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2006-05-19 08:42:40]
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Re: Deeper in the Empty Shell of Everything
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 08:49:04 AM AEST
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First off, let me just say that your title is awesome. Nice touches of gory and despondent imagery - I especially liked the last 3 lines. Beautiful nightmares....sublime.
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Re: Deeper in the Empty Shell of Everything
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by wizard on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 10:43:16 AM AEST
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wow...i really like this...you've done a great job with your descriptions.
i love the last stanza.
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Re: Deeper in the Empty Shell of Everything
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 01:08:56 PM AEST
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the metaphors..imagery...fantastic, very dark, i absolutely loved it.
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Re: Deeper in the Empty Shell of Everything
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by Remi on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 05:21:15 PM AEST
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| great imagary with words and how it goes together so smoothly lovely write |
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