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Aching Intentions
Contributed by
Lo2681
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Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 01:59:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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So easy to say I walked away,
At least this is how the story is portrayed,
Deep down inside you didn’t see this coming ,
But all the while I felt I was running.
It broke me inside the way it broke you,
These desolate feelings wont rise for healing,
You act as though our souls never met,
And I’m aching inside but you haven’t seen it yet.
And in all the turmoil my pain has become yours,
This connection between us,
Has now become ignored,
You tell me you feel it and you know I do too,
Push me not father but closer to you.
I bled you your tears that you had not cried in some time,
You crawled in my veins and poisoned my lips,
I’m so sorry.
I unburied a pain I once helped u dismiss.
This aching inside I don’t think can go away,
I love you so much,
But these words remain astray.
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Lo2681
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2006-05-19 01:59:17]
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Sordida on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 02:07:05 AM AEST
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| This is really powerful. I love the line 'I bled you your tears' That makes me feel the really connection. It's a really amazing piece or work. |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 02:22:52 AM AEST
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very sad and deep write
good write
take care |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 03:05:05 AM AEST
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I can relate to this, you've described your emotions very transparently that it's hard for the readers not to feel as if they themselves are heartbroken. Well done.
~Ave |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Jackee_line on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 05:10:41 AM AEST
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| well done, well written |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by wizard on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 06:18:31 AM AEST
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nicely done...very sad.
wiz |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 06:57:43 PM AEST
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Hey Lo~
A sad, deep write filled with unhappy emotions. Through ur words u have made ur reader feel ur pain and emotions. It takes awhile, but time does eventually heal all wounds. Very well penned Lo~ Keep up the awesome work.
warm huggers & smiles,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Aching Intentions
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 10:03:05 PM AEST
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Wow,
Your pain and ache have inspired a beautiful but heartwrenching poem . I once loved like that, Well done and my heart goes out to you,
HUgs
LG |
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