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Falling
Contributed by
Live2Die
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Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:09:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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A garbled mess upon this shattering cliff,
A single silhouette standing alone, watching
As pieces fall, one by one, off the edge
Nothing near to catch upon, to grip close
No soft eagle wings to land upon and drift
Instead, sharp rocks peak at the bottom to catch and tear
As streams of water pour forth, their levee’s broken
A single darkened silhouette, no longer still
Wandering slowly away, encased by the shadows of oncoming night.
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Live2Die
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2006-05-15 22:09:31]
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Re: Falling
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by Cupid on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:19:27 PM AEST
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Wow! This is really one big block of imagery!
Love it!
I love the last line, how you describe the silhouette as being ENCASED by the shadows...
Keep up the great writing, Live2Die! |
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Re: Falling
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by Pink-Cherry on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:56:30 PM AEST
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| I dont think there is anything for me to criticize.. this poem was exceptionally creative and original! |
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Re: Falling
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by ek_da_poet on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 11:40:23 PM AEST
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| i liked it alot!, it was short and easy to read |
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