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Un-Named
Contributed by
MBH
on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 05:56:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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You are a nova flaring bright
on the pin-pricked velvet of my heart's night
Bright stars around you seem to fade,
My constant guides are soon all gone,
The ordered spheres are made un-made,
But you remain to draw me on.
Transfixed by your fire,
With reason flung aside,
My soul ascending higher,
Yet an emptyness inside.
Such glorious power will always die
And your light begins to wane
Who am I to dare to try
to trap it in a name?
And yet a part of you I hold:
Etched in the view of my souls gaze
An after-image, pure and bold
A blazing sight that cannot fade.
So you remain a nova flaring bright
On the pin-pricked velvet of my heart's night.
Copyright ©
MBH
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2006-05-15 05:56:23]
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Re: Un-Named
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 08:38:00 AM AEST
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I can safely say I know exactly how you feel. You snared my attention with the very first line - "nova flaring bright, pin-pricked velvet" - you don't often see pretty word pairings like this anymore. Suffice to say, for someone who claims he isn't a poet, this is quite a great poem. And don't despair....there is a girl out there who is the right one for you.
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Re: Un-Named
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by suesmuse1 on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:07:53 AM AEST
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| Wow! so different from the norm! Keep writing! |
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Re: Un-Named
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:24:23 AM AEST
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This was a great poem.. I liked no wait loved how you wrote this.. the way everything fit together and the flow was simply wonderful.. Great poem..
take care
christina |
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Re: Un-Named
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by katt on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 02:01:54 AM AEST
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Enjoyed your poem. good imagery and flow.
katt |
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