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Ghost of a Dream
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 05:04:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
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...And the ghost of this dream is haunting me,
Leaving heartache in my wake,
And tears to fall in frozen time,
To memories of when words were mine.
And broken breezes blow me by,
Flying me through jagged clouds.
Those edges cut our hopeless ties,
Yet cannot muffle lonely cries.
Silence hovers on the air,
The final hour is soon to come,
And heartbeats rush to say goodbye,
The tears hold back and long to cry.
Before it dies will come the truth,
Spoken through a slaughtered smile,
Words will come through monotone,
They'll hang nearby, till all alone.
The ghosts of we are stalking me,
Grasping at rememberance,
Dying with such elegance,
In hope to set me free.
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lostinmyself
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2006-05-14 17:04:47]
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by spider on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 05:15:29 PM AEST
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i think explaining would be good but nevertheless a really good poem.
i guess in a way the lack of explanation means everyone can interpret it their own way which is good.
like the ryhming too, i find sometimes poems sound like they are trying to rhyme but this one doesn't :)
well anyway, me likies the poem :D that was a longwinded way of saying that wasn't it? |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by wizard on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 06:28:07 PM AEST
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i thought this was a great write...i like the last stanza best.
nicely done!
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 08:12:27 PM AEST
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Sometimes, poetry needs no explanation. This is one of those times....
Brilliant write..
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 09:06:40 PM AEST
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Well, sometimes I read a poem and I am completely taken by every part of it. This is one of those times , truely incredible,
LG |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 09:13:23 PM AEST
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The last stanza totally pwns me...heh. I agree with spider, I like how everyone has their own interpretation of a poem. And this, is just a lovely, hauntingly lovely poem. Do you get tired of me telling you that all the time, Phil? :p
~Ave |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Lo2681 on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 10:32:02 PM AEST
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It is a little over my head but I guess it's one of those pieces that you can fit into ur own life and give ur own meaning...which I think is cool. Very nicely done. You are very discriptive. What a talent!
~Lo |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by shelby on
Sunday, 14th May 2006 @ 10:36:05 PM AEST
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Ghost of a dream, yes I understand this well. Very delicate and heartfelt write my friend.
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 12:38:32 AM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this read. The rhyme flow was good.....kept me flowing like a breeze, through these words. The first and second stanzas, really captured me. The fourth stanza, the words hit like a sledgehammer. Great write. Thank you for sharing, Peace and hugs, Laura |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 02:05:53 AM AEST
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Aw, Phil, the emotion in this just takes one's heart and yanks at those ol' strings. Very powerful and excellently written.
*huge hug*
Tim
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:04:00 AM AEST
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Such sadness and heartache....yet is that a bit of hope at the end? hope of and end to the pain?
I hope so. Your writes are always so full of emotion...hugs. |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 07:34:32 PM AEST
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Holy wow, hun. What an incredible piece. I am certain there
are a multitude of people who relate to this. Your talent never
dulls hun. It shines on regardless of subject.
This piece, especially, is so heartfelt and forlorn.
Almost a plea in it's struggle to impart emotion of
the most beautiful, horrible kind. Believe me when I say,
I wish I had written this. Flawlessly brilliant!
*hugs*
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 05:44:07 PM AEST
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This poem reached right into me . I thought the last verse was outstanding,
Den |
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Re: Ghost of a Dream
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 10th June 2006 @ 02:33:30 PM AEST
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No need to explain PhillyGirl...this is beautiful because the emotion is candid, and raw with truth. Your poetry is never lacking in feeling, and that's why I always enjoy a trip to your account page.
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