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The Game
Contributed by
Jen54
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Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 02:50:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Here we go again
The clock is ticking
The yelling has started
And I'm losing myself once again
In their deadly game
But the rules have changed
And death is the key
Hopefully I can make it through
And prove to them that I want to live
Copyright ©
Jen54
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2006-05-13 14:50:52]
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Re: The Game
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by palebluesun on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 04:04:22 PM AEST
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| wow.Short and intriguing.I love the seeming paradoc between the title where you ask why 'they" want to hurt you so much and the end where you suggest you are trying to prove them you "want" to live. This is a puzzle that can be decoded with many different scenarios.Life itself is a deadly game!This poem is a keeper.I love this just the way it is.Could not improve on it! Great job! |
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Re: The Game
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by palebluesun on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 04:09:54 PM AEST
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| wow.Short and intriguing.I love how this poem grabs you and is never contrived.This is a puzzle that can be decoded with many different scenarios.I took a little while to realize you may be trying to convince yourself?This poem is a keeper.I love this just the way it is. Great job! |
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Re: The Game
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by kaitee on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 06:48:56 PM AEST
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i hope you can prove it to them too..whoever "them" may be...
Short but how it has so much emotion is unbelieveable. Good luck and keep the poems coming.
~Kaitee |
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Re: The Game
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 01:57:22 AM AEST
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Very short yet very powerful with emotion. You have displayed your emotions very well in this poem. Please don't let "them" win.
*huge hug*
Tim
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Re: The Game
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by Tiffyo4 on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 01:35:54 PM AEST
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i like it alot short and to the point never stop writing
Tiff |
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Re: The Game
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by Trisha on
Tuesday, 13th June 2006 @ 09:00:09 PM AEST
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| i hope you can prove it to them t |
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