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Eternal Rites
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 09:04:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Shall the day ever break when life
finds us merely husband and wife,
with passion not so much denied
as neatly folded and put aside..
and the old joyous insistence
reduced to some quiet coexistence?
Shall we one morning, awake in bed
with not a carnal thought in our head,
look on each other without surprise
out of widely awake and uncandid eyes;
to touch and know no immediate urge
where all of our mysteries once would converge?
Speaking for the sake of something to say
and now and then put on a display
of elaborate mimicry of the past to prove
that ritual reigns, where passion once ruled
and calmly observe the bleakest of rites
that once made splendor of all our nights?
Dear, when we stop being outrageous
and no longer find so firmly contagious
the innumerable ecstasies we would find
in the stroke of a hand or leap of a mind,
not now or then love, need we fear.. thus,
those two sad people will never be us.
B
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 10:13:44 PM AEST
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Wow . .. that is all I can muster here. Damn, Billy, your
economy with words and incredible talent for displaying
them in such a meaningful and profound way never
EVER ceases to stagger me. Unimaginable genius in here.
That last line . .. perfection.
god . .. I love this completely!
~Breezy
[who is intensely glad to see you posting again. : ) ] |
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 11:19:39 PM AEST
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Beautiful work as always Bill with a birds eye view of obvious revealations into the discontented heart and soul of love.
Ben |
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by wizard on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 11:26:30 PM AEST
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wow man...i loved this! such great flow and beautifully poetic! good to see you posting...your inner thoughts flow so smooth in this write! some may differ with the vow in this write..yet i concur with you, its a good one!
wizid |
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 12:46:49 AM AEST
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Wow i agree with Breezy about this one Billy.
You did an awsome job on this piece, |
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 07:14:27 AM AEST
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Billy~
WoW what can I say to give this remarkable poem the credit it so much deserves. You are a true poetic genius. You weave ur magic onto these pages for ur readers to treasure and enjoy. Absolutely flawless Billy.The last two lines superb. The king does it again. Hats off to u sweet guy. It's so good to see u posting again.
love n hugs from ur fan/friend,
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Eternal Rites
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by Leslie on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 11:00:32 PM AEST
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| I really liked this poem. When you care about or love another person, and make a concerted effort, passion rather than boredom can be the norm. A positive ending to a sad commentary on love made this poem very poignant. |
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