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cruel joke
Contributed by
anotherface
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Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 03:48:01 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Im not laughing. When does it end;
this cruel joke played on me?
bound by absent burdens, makes it difficult to breath.
A single ripple in a sea of futility
Bleak, barren waters hide the warm welcome of relief
A notion of discomfort, a notion so untimely deceased.
Collectively abolished by the voluntary weak.
Diluted words of wisdom, the faded covet to be free.
This world, entwined in self deceit; offers no release.
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anotherface
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2006-05-12 03:48:01]
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Re: cruel joke
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kevin on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 02:46:32 PM AEST
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wow, for a first poem that was extremely impressive...heck for a 50th poem that's awesome. Great, adn i mean great use of imagery. Very sad and gloomy poem, but nonetheless very beautiful...in a haunting sort of way. Please, keep writing
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Re: cruel joke
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by desireemiote on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 10:44:39 AM AEST
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This definitely a beautifully haunting poem. Keep pouring you emotions into poems. Wouldn't wqant to lose such raw talent as you. This world needs to keep all good poets living.. even during writer's block*wink* hehe. If you need to chat or anything go ahead and message me or im me.
cuddleupnwiner on yahoo and aim.
Megan(and her bun in the oven)
p.s. keep up the good work. Hope you get support from a teacher n expanding your poetry horizons. Sounds stupid but it really does help. |
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