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in your eyes, behind the lies
Contributed by
xXxmegsxXx
on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 11:48:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I see it in your shaded eyes
Below the surface, behind the lies
I see the pain you lock inside
The loneliness you try to hide
The darkness that dwells within
Which is making your heart wear thin
I see the sadness and the pain
I've seen you standing in the rain
all the while knowing there's nothing I can do
To stop you from feeling blue
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Re: in your eyes, behind the lies
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by kaitee on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 01:02:03 PM AEST
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i actually think the title you have for it now works.
I liked the read. good job
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Re: in your eyes, behind the lies
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by katt on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 02:32:35 PM AEST
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A good read and write. Good rhyme and rhythym. If you wanted to shorten the title to "Behind the Lies" you could or just leave it as it is. Enjoyed reading this. Great job.
Katt |
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Re: in your eyes, behind the lies
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by chaos78 on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 03:36:04 PM AEST
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| i like title i also enjoyed the read |
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Re: in your eyes, behind the lies
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by rmcondon on
Thursday, 11th May 2006 @ 04:30:57 AM AEST
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| I too think the title is good. Particularly enjoyed the poem though. A well portrayed feeling of helplessness to me. |
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