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My Outlook On Things
Contributed by
kaitee
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Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 04:11:22 PM in AEST
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Lost to the type of style you are
Too bad ice and riches never got you that far
It's a shame you settle with petty gifts and glory
Your life is gonna be one lameass story
So what you had some fun even robbed a few stores
What? You think all these faults aren't yours?
You think you tough bred from the streets of pain
You're not ****, I tell you, you've never experienced true rain
The bling bling era is cute but its about to be done
Living for fakeness doesn't seem to fun
True hardcore thug is what you say you are
Funny seeing how you cant even break into your own car
Alone and lost youll grow up to be
Still trying to fulfill your stupidass fantasy
Take that **** out your mouth and listen and behave
You wanna spend the rest of your life as a true world-made slave
Relax, it wont kill you just take a hit
Thats the whole line that started it
So go ahead and do what they tell you to
But in the end they'll only say to hell with you
Locked within your so called second home
Dont be surprised to find a lock to your dome
So talk **** now while no one is here
Truly show them you have no fear
But deep in your soul you feel it growing
The realism that this idea isnt flowing
Too late now. yo'uve lost your life
Now only have you dealt with true pain and strife
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kaitee
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Re: My Outlook On Things
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by ek_da_poet on
Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 04:16:37 PM AEST
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| horrible poem, the way i understood it is that you were robbed many times and lost precious valuables, when does your sadness end |
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Re: My Outlook On Things
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 04:25:22 PM AEST
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I agree with this outlook.
Nice write.
I really understood what you said. It is what I have always thought about the topic in the poem.
:) once again, I agree with it. |
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Re: My Outlook On Things
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 9th May 2006 @ 09:34:31 PM AEST
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I agree..
but to steal a quote:
"Stupid IS.. as stupid DOES"
...great post-
B |
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Re: My Outlook On Things
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by ibelieve-dreamsonhorizon on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 04:51:25 PM AEST
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can you rhyme? you bet you can.
your assonance gives the poem a really polished feeling. it seems that each line is a story
nice work
love the way you picked the words |
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Re: My Outlook On Things
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by Lilly-Quill on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 05:30:59 PM AEST
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OMG~, you've even added some words to fool's book of buffoonery! You go girl...
Get on-it~
You've shone it~
A lame-ass should own it~
Still, I can empathize with one's for not support system; better poor deceitful thugs than no support at all. After all, it takes courage to be different and make one's own way.
Oh the beauty of this~, it reminding me how Wisdom calls to the simple (in Proverbs 8). Thanks for sharing, a most enlightening read.
~Lilly-Quill |
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