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This Girl
Contributed by
confused
on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 07:04:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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This girl of confusion and pain
Is so so sick and tired of playing the same old game
She’s sick of acting like its all ok
She’s tired of wearing a fake smile upon her face
Ever since the day he left her
It’s all been about tears
Now she has no one in which she can confide her fears
This girl of frustration and anger
May be putting her own life in danger
Suicidal thoughts constantly flow thru her mind
Now its just a matter of time
This girl of sadness and determination
Really should be on some sort of medication
She’s always depressed and never smiles
I swear her smile used to stretch a mile
This girl of loneliness and deception
Is trying to find a new perception
On life
This girl of old smiles and laughs
Is sick of letting her life just pass
She wishes she could have done things a different way
Instead of falling in love with him that one day
This girl of new ways in life
Just picked up her knife
She slowly brought it to her wrist
And with one quick strike clenched her fist
The tears poured from her beautiful blue eyes
She forgets about the taunts
The loneliness
The lies
As the blood drops from her wound that is so deep in her skin
Her soul slowly begins to thin
Her body drops to the floor and her wrist quickly begins to feel sore
This girl who used to be so joyous and care free
Is now lying on the ground unconsciously
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2006-05-06 07:04:54]
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Re: This Girl
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by deathdrop on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 10:54:14 AM AEST
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it never matters about how long or short a piece of literature is because it's all about the quality, not the quantity and you have managed to create perfect rhyme and imagary in this.
well done.
... i just hope that you're not planning to do this your-self...
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Re: This Girl
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by Forgotten_soul on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 10:58:50 AM AEST
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| u make me want to cry |
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Re: This Girl
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by purplestary on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 11:35:21 AM AEST
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| it is not too long. no peice of writting can possibly be too long or too short..it's about the message, and the story. you did an excelent job expressing this. and yes, i agree...quality not quantity... |
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Re: This Girl
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 12:40:19 PM AEST
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Well written. I hope this is fictional..
Jenni |
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Re: This Girl
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by justme03 on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 10:07:19 PM AEST
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omg kate!
this is awesome!
i think you are so talented
i love yew! |
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Re: This Girl
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by Nessa_Lee on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 08:40:54 PM AEST
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This is exactly how my life used to be. Fell in love with the boy who broke my heart, and suicide seemed to be the only way out. I enjoyed reading this, so keep up the good work!
~*~Nes~*~ |
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