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Why?
Contributed by
Drapes
on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 01:16:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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Why am I so quiet,
Every time you're around.
I open my mouth to greet you,
But out of it comes no sound.
Why am I so tense,
From seeing you in the distance.
As soon as I catch a glimse of you,
My muscles pull that instant.
Why am I suddenly silenced,
By your relaxing, soothing voice.
Every time you speak, I listen,
My ears make the choice.
Why am I left breathless,
From passing you in the hall.
Just imagine if you looked at me,
But only you can make that call.
Why am I a dreamer,
Thinking I have a chance.
I'm wishing upon a star,
About a hopeless romance.
Why am I pretending,
That things are going fine.
That I'm not just some girl,
And that you're not always on my mind.
Why am I invisible,
No matter what I do.
I feel like such a nothing,
Because I don't exist to you.
So why am I in love,
With a jerk who couldn't care less.
I can't take it any more.
My heart has failed the test.
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Drapes
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2006-05-05 13:16:08]
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Re: Why?
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 01:44:30 PM AEST
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*sigh* I have known, and still know so many people who have been there.
I guess a lot of people have asked many of these question. I have.
I like the write. You could do with looking over your poem for typos before posting, though. Just give it a last check before you press submit, becxause in the end, it will make your poem look more professional.
I think some of the rhymes were pretty unique, I like the first stanza a lot.
Keep hope ;)
Good write,
*hugs*
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Why?
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by Kayden on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 03:23:04 PM AEST
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| Great poem... Intense feeling is the thing that makes this poem one of few that are incredible... Such a great job... I like this poem a lot |
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Re: Why?
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 6th May 2006 @ 10:06:50 AM AEST
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| I loved how this piece flowed...almost like a song. Great rhymes. Great subject that I think all of us can relate to. Good job. Peace, Laura |
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