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Melded
Contributed by
wizard
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Thursday, 4th May 2006 @ 08:38:05 PM in AEST
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I’ve but an hour ‘fore the day shall cease
And a night of loneliness ensues
And though your searing thought subdues
I long for a night of granted peace
While the moon transforms the sky
With its transcending glow,
Our sole star’s light in soft echo;
From its beauty you’ll find an angel’s cry
The twilight brings its saddened song
Which emanates through the sleeping day,
If it had but a line to say
It would say that we belong
Copyright ©
wizard
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2006-05-04 20:38:05]
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Re: Melded
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th May 2006 @ 09:28:12 PM AEST
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this is beautiful.. I pray you do have a wonderful night and day .... I don't mind if you did repeat ... your poems are great... you are a great writer... thank you for sharing your talent.
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Re: Melded
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 02:21:51 AM AEST
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I like it - simple, but pleasingly so. Sometimes it's as good writing "lines" or "a few verses" as a "poem", something self-contained and complete. Word-music is the result either way.
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Re: Melded
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 03:24:35 PM AEST
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I've only read a few of your poems, to be honest, but I wouldn't say you were at all repetetive. Sure, sometimes the subject may be the same, but, you always produce a unique poem, that is always different to the others.
I like this. I think the second stanza's fit together better than the first one with either of the others. (If that made any sense)
Good write,
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Melded
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 07:16:42 PM AEST
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Repetitive? In what way, dear wiz? In sentiment; in thought; in words ??
Gosh, if this is being repetitive, pleased if you would repeat again and again!!
Besides . . . writing poetry is so intensely personal you should always write what
you feel [or wish] not what you think someone wants to hear, [or read, as it were].
What a delightful "hodgepodge" (as you put it), of thought and how well you've
infused them together in this wonderful composition. I can't decide if it be happy
or sad. It evokes many emotions.
I ADORE the second stanza, as I do all mentionings of the moon and such. :-)
A very ethereal touch flows throughout the entirety of this piece.
Interesting rhyming scheme. I have to say, you, sir, are one of the most unique
poets on this site. And simply a joy to read !!
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Re: Melded
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by brew on
Friday, 5th May 2006 @ 09:41:36 PM AEST
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When ONE writes, its .........from the inner, and it does say what is felt. Saying repetive, is,,,,,,,,like saying if you tell ONE over and over you love them, is wrong... NO!!!!!!!!!!!! WOW, what lines you have used, and what words have been posted. ALways a pleasure to take the eye and look over on YOUR writes. BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!!
HUGS
Brew~ |
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Re: Melded
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by MysticFireFairy on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 04:12:44 PM AEST
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| Oh wow thank you for the poem comment so I comment on yours I really like the rhyme sceme you chose, and I love how it sets the image. keep it up |
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Re: Melded
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 11th May 2006 @ 06:43:10 AM AEST
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Hmmmm if this is a sample of what you write, then keep 'em coming!
I like that fact that you have managed to combine both the beauty of belonging and sadness. Not an easy mix....Bravo! |
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Re: Melded
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 11th May 2006 @ 04:09:55 PM AEST
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bro.. this is a beautiful poem.. and not at all repetitive- and though it's a little differ for you..
it's still from the inner and thats all that counts..
Great post -
B |
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Re: Melded
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by Lo2681 on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 12:34:35 AM AEST
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| Beautiful piece. I love the way u words came together. Good job on this one :) Very enjoyable indeed. ~Lo |
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Re: Melded
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 17th May 2006 @ 06:42:06 AM AEST
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Hey Wiz,
Repetitive not. I am so drawn to ur magical work for it's always written from the depths of ur heart. This piece triggers happy and sad emotions. I loved it. Thanks so much for sharing ur enchanting poetry with us.
*warm hugs and smiles*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Melded
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th June 2006 @ 03:21:48 PM AEST
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I don't know how I got 15 reads and comments behind, but I'm gonna use quite a few of 'em to read your YPDC posted book of magnificence! I already said your a wizard of words and this one just reaffirms that statement. Wow!
wabl
KenMoore
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