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you spoil me
Contributed by
roisin
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Tuesday, 4th February 2003 @ 10:40:00 PM in AEST
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you spoil me
roses, three white, one red
candlelight
soulful bluesy jazz filling the air
chardonnay, creamy baked brie, grapes and those lovely little crackers
a gorgeous wood fire flickering away.
soft, magical kisses between
poetry of blake, yeats,eliot and
the silly, funny stories you've brought with you tonight
warm fuzzies
shared laughter
feet being rubbed
the occasional hug
loving whispers
and
one slow and sensuous dance....
and then it's time for you to go.....
so..
i become your coffee-grinding mama
i know you like it steamy, creamy, hot and sweet.
just a little something,
hot on the kitchen table,
before you go out the door.
Copyright ©
roisin
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2003-02-04 22:40:00]
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Re: you spoil me
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th February 2003 @ 11:10:52 PM AEST
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| oh rosie you are funny!! |
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Re: you spoil me
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 5th February 2003 @ 02:00:03 AM AEST
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| Are you sure it wasn't you on the kitchen table! Oh, how I loved this - man I dream of these things too! Thanks Rosie for the ideas! ... Jan |
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Re: you spoil me
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by roisin on
Wednesday, 5th February 2003 @ 07:36:10 AM AEST
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ta for your comments...hope this piece brings a smile to a few faces today....
rosie
ps did to mine!!!!!! |
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Re: you spoil me
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by Dani on
Wednesday, 5th February 2003 @ 07:36:22 PM AEST
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| hehe... great write Rosie, as always! |
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Re: you spoil me
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by Wrybod on
Thursday, 6th February 2003 @ 10:38:59 AM AEST
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| rosie, Who's a lucky girl then? A very vivid picture I could smell the coffee |
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Re: you spoil me
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by Ilhar on
Friday, 7th February 2003 @ 07:00:37 PM AEST
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enjoyable write have to try some of that on my aniversary
Shari |
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Re: you spoil me
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by mckayla on
Friday, 7th February 2003 @ 09:22:39 PM AEST
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Great poem!!!
mckayla |
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Re: you spoil me
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 8th February 2003 @ 04:51:16 PM AEST
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| oooh lala !!!!! A little "breakfast" ala kitchen table huh? hehe ;o) For gods sake move the silverware before someone gets a fork stuck somewhere. :oP Great funny and naughty write! Well done rosie! Larry |
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Re: you spoil me
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by krismisevski on
Sunday, 21st September 2003 @ 12:55:48 AM AEST
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"just a little something,
hot on the kitchen table"
Great lines! Very spontaneous. I'd almost like to see the words 'hot and sweet' removed. Just 'steamy and creamy'. Leave the rest to the imagination. The line that follows is the knock-out punch. A little less info could be a better build up for the piece.
Joyfull read.
Kris Misevski |
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Re: you spoil me
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by Merry on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 03:58:59 PM AEST
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Oh rosie - this is great - is this guy for real? Lock and bolt the door - don't let him leave lol. what a cool write!!!!
merry |
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