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Roaring Sea
Contributed by
wizard
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Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 08:37:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Oh! This early day of May,
Born into the oceans sway.
Ferocious winds clear the bay;
Without a bird upon the eye
And the sky in gloom of a night gone by.
It seems that in this bleakest hour,
While perched within my lonely tower,
For a solemn heart the gray clouds scour;
Though all were sent to flee…
And forevermore it shall be.
Roaring seas that so confide
Of rippling secrets stashed inside,
A chance of love once washed aside,
One for which my heart contends;
With hopes this sea of anguish ends.
A brighter day shall soon emerge.
The gloom this day is sure to purge.
This brighter day is on the verge
Of a solid, unworn pursuit;
One of which I so salute.
Copyright ©
wizard
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 09:11:09 PM AEST
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Holy WOW! I am blown away with this. Truly. What masterful conception and
creative use of imagery. I am reminded of Poe upon reading this, (and not
to take away the audacity and brilliance of this piece). It could just be the
fact that I have come into possession of a most amazing and treasured book
of Poe, that I am reminded.
BUT, having said all that, I am completely impressed. The metaphors alone
are enough to provoke admiration. Your work is so diverse.
Yes, a very moving piece. Forgive me if this sounds patronizing or haughty, but I feel your
work evolves with each write. Just when I think I've seen your best, or can no longer be
impressed . . . you post something magnificent like this. Bravo!
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 09:28:38 PM AEST
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there's so much I wanna say..know and can relate to-
Pleasentries first..
great composition bro.. (one of your newest and most shining attributes)
..also, you've recently narrowed things down a bit.. ie: word usage, idealism, ect. ...overall simplicity.
..like french food or fine wine-
simple and finer with age.
..some of the best work I've read in a long while.
Secondly..
I know every word of this..most intimately.. last verse in particular.
Those who know you well, would say that this might be the best by you yet.. really-
Sincerely..
B
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by shelby on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 10:35:10 PM AEST
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Its like Im walking right there. Loved the entire write. Nice flow and ryhme scheme.
Michelle |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 11:23:00 PM AEST
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And YOU, Sir Wizard, I do salute for this masterpiece.... Loved it!!!!
Jenni |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 2nd May 2006 @ 12:41:58 PM AEST
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A beautiful day... I love the sea. With all its power and might, it still when to rest and simply enjoy the day.
Sorry, got carried away. I love the second stanza, the lines aboutr a solemn heart, that was just beautiful.
Take care,
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 07:13:32 AM AEST
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Paul~
You have one hell of an awesome write here.
I have re-read this magical piece over and over again. An outstanding masterpiece with all the credits going to the remarkable poet that penned it. Well done ~Wiz~
*warm huggers*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2006 @ 04:29:02 PM AEST
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This brighter day is on the verge
Of a solid, unworn pursuit;
One of which I so salute
Keep up that hope, prayers are with you, this is a most fabulous write.. very very deep..
RaquelLeah |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 13th May 2006 @ 04:36:31 PM AEST
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The title of this drew me in, and I was actually kinda suprised at the poem underneath it.
I love the third stanza, it's definitely my favourite of the whole poem, with some really pretty imagery (loves the sea) but a sort of melancholy, yet hopeful, feeling to it.
It brought out a lot of emotions in me, and any write that does that is good in my eyes.
Great write,
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Dizza_13 on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 02:57:33 AM AEST
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Excellent.
diz |
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd June 2006 @ 11:38:35 PM AEST
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This a great colaboration between the sea and love it self, and r they not both ambiguious in nature. As always great poetry
along with excellant craftsmanship.
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Re: Roaring Sea
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th June 2006 @ 03:26:06 PM AEST
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Magnificent. Just just MAGNIFICENT!
wabl
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