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I Am Done
Contributed by
jess_mac
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Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 08:54:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Twist the impaler, scrape the bone
at least when you touch me I don't feel alone
Hearts ripped and bleeding
what a beautiful feeling
God, when will this chaos start ending
For you, my love, I am done backwards bending
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Re: I Am Done
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by flamingblade on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 11:06:44 AM AEST
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your right it'short
but it gets to the point.
i like it
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Re: I Am Done
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by Willofree on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 11:13:58 AM AEST
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Succinct, yet powerful imagery. Perhaps paradoxical in that the imagery seems so deep and painful. Yet the words "beautiful "and "... don't feel alone" seem to counter in a way.... yet the ending longs for the chaos to end.
Very interesting and intreguing poem. Very creative
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Re: I Am Done
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by JGB on
Sunday, 30th April 2006 @ 01:36:24 AM AEST
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Just what it was to be! A short one, but saying all it should say.
I felt this way about someone once. He is a great perosn........
I found the Love of my Life now. |
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Re: I Am Done
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by Tiffyo4 on
Monday, 1st May 2006 @ 10:50:44 AM AEST
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| very well writtin |
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Re: I Am Done
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by little_genna on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 07:38:11 AM AEST
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i can relate. i thought i had done with my ex but we got back together and when he touches me now i no longer feel alone like i used to.
the line
hearts ripped and bleeding
what a beautiful feeling
really got me and its stuck in my mind. The poem may be short but some of the best said things come are sharp and to the point, which gives impact upon the receiver.
Also
"God, when will this chaos start ending"
i have asked God that so many times, yet the chaos carries on. I am not massively religious but we all have a purpose and some of us cannot thrive without chaos even though we find it so hard to deal with some times.
This poem is very good for so few words, but some people have the talent to capture such images with ease!
well done
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Re: I Am Done
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd May 2006 @ 07:04:44 AM AEST
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Good poetry, the message therein touches a lot of people...
I'm sure a high percentage of people who read this one will be able to relate.
Well done,
J. |
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