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Poisoned
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 07:28:52 PM in AEST
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You whispered hate into my dreams,
And wrapped yourself around my heart,
You woke me up with my own screams,
As you tore me apart.
And it's pounding here inside my mind,
Each time you bit in to my chest,
Venom is running through my veins,
I don't have too long left.
These tears may as well be blood,
I'm dying from your wounds,
I gave you nothing, except love,
But I gave it far too soon.
I'm dying here, within your grasp,
Your hold was far too tight,
I'm drowning in this poison,
From your deadly bite.
I feel the shock, it's setting in,
I couldn't see the deciet
Underneath your skin
But
You whispered hate into my dreams,
And wrapped yourself around my heart,
You woke me up with my own screams,
As you tore me apart.
And I am poisoned...
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Re: Poisoned
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by ham323 on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 08:12:09 PM AEST
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| I can relate.. Good poem. |
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Re: Poisoned
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by slogan on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 08:38:35 PM AEST
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| great write... I wrote a similar poem call "Sweet Judas"..good job..jh |
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Re: Poisoned
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 05:05:01 AM AEST
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Aw, Phil.
*ginormous hug*
Wow, awesome! Did I say wow yet? You are a brilliant poet.
Geeze, I absolutely love this line: "You woke me up with my own screams".
*applauds*
Thank you for sharing such an emotional poem.
Sincerely,
Tim |
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Re: Poisoned
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by shelby on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 11:09:59 AM AEST
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Oh Phill, huge hugs. Im so sorry your hurting. You captured much emotion in your poem, I feel it and I do understand. You know where to reach me if you need to talk. In life we seem to lose more than we gain at times specially in affairs of the heart, but those that do stay around are the gems of heart we keep for a lifetime.
hugsssssss
Michelle |
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Re: Poisoned
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by pixie on
Thursday, 4th May 2006 @ 10:38:48 AM AEST
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powerful stuff here Philly, sorry that you are hurting, if there's anything I can do let me know *hugs*
take care
Pix xx |
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Re: Poisoned
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th May 2006 @ 11:38:09 AM AEST
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Oh my my my Phillygirl!! There is much in this piece that you have addressed.
An incredible honest outpouring of the soul in such an amazingly talented write.
This was the most ingenius and clever analogy of deceit and misguided trust I've
yet to witness. You must feel a sense of release in writing this one, hun. The
troubled heart is a weary thing. I'm here always and forever for you. Know that -
I tremble each time I read this line . . .
"You woke me up with my own screams"
Bloody brilliant hun. Emotive in the most beautiful, horrible way.
*hugs you tight*
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Re: Poisoned
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:12:11 AM AEST
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| Amazing how when we give of ourselves we don't always recieve back what we expect, yet hopefully we will continue to keep giving, looking for oft we know not what, but the hope that it will make us happy....Keep giving Phyllis, it may be just around the corner. |
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Re: Poisoned
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 20th July 2006 @ 10:30:38 PM AEST
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I clicked on the title alone.. but how relevant this is .. I cannot say- though I feel your need to escape, and subsequent pain through this-
Love and peace to you Phil-
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