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Dead Letter Postscript
Contributed by
spike
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Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 10:27:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Dear You,
Just an add-on to the last,
I know that we’re over and the past is past
But I want you to know, I’m doing okay,
And I hope that you’ll reply someday
So stop worrying that I’ll misread the signs
- I’m not longing for those times.
No, I’m not writing in blood, or tears,
Just plain black ink I bought through Sears
I’m not spilling my heart out in every word
(Even I’d think that’s absurd)
The return address this time, isn’t “Hell”
- I’ve climbed out of that well.
Anyway, I’ve finally got it through my head,
That little canary of emotions is dead
The bone cage is quiet, no shrill tweets,
Its just the blood pumping, a few soft beats
Still, I should have better read the signs
- When the bird stops breathing, the heart resigns.
I’ll close off now, but please reply,
Just a few lines, by and by
I’ve moved on from being rejected,
But do we have to be so disconnected?
Break ups are not victimless crimes
- So think of me sometimes.
Yours Truly,
Copyright ©
spike
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2006-04-21 22:27:58]
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Re: Dead Letter Postscript
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 10:49:56 PM AEST
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Wow... This tugged at my heartstrings!! I can truly identify with this. Well penned...
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Re: Dead Letter Postscript
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 24th April 2006 @ 10:30:05 PM AEST
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To be honest, I'm having a hard time deciding upon the comment to leave here. I'm not sure why that is...
From an emotional perspective... you pretty much had me with "Dear You". From a pure poetic standpoint, it is the third stanza that appeals to me the most. But... perhaps what strikes me most about this piece is.... simply the inclination to write it. Yes... I think that (the last part there) is what I wanting to say.
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Re: Dead Letter Postscript
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th April 2006 @ 05:57:00 PM AEST
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There ya go again, Spike. Takin' universal situation, puttin' it to such a personal level that I'm saddened for you personally by the perceived regretted loss o' someone special. A MASTER bringin' it down to earth with "Just plain black ink I bought through Sears" Let's see, have ya heard the word SUPERB lately?
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Re: Dead Letter Postscript
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by Keilantra on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 11:06:50 AM AEST
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When writing somehting so close to the heart, it's hard not to sound cliche, but you write this carefully and excellently. Good for you. it has the emotion that so many of these types of poems lack.
xXx
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