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In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 08:57:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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This voice,
That tiptoes onto the page
And whispers in layers –
Picking up and putting down
Words with little pulleys –
Is precious to me.
She was there, with me,
When I broke the window
And there, every time
I shut a door.
She was there the day
I scattered red rose petals
And she was with me, too
When I first found
The all-of-everything.
She was the one that discovered
Sylvia and Rainer and Fernando
And the others…
And it was her
That understood them
And gave them to me.
She is the one that screams
Whisper-screams
In other people’s words
When she isn’t brave enough
To use her own.
It is in her hand,
That exists the white rose
That I can’t seem to find
Because
She was the one
That saw the true blue
In my grandmother’s eyes
As she was slipping away.
And
She was the one
That said,
“No more”
When
I could not.
And now…
After all the years
I’m only just realizing
(****)
That She will be the one
To follow the path
To its terrible end…
And that I...
(Oh God)
Will
Have
To
Say
Goodbye
To my oldest,
Dearest friend.
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
... [
2006-04-20 20:57:25] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 09:13:15 PM AEST (User
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OMG, Snemmy, this is sad.
I salute your bravery! And thank you for sharing this, wonderful wonderful poem.
You are, in my humble opinion, a genius and if not you are a wizard of words. Magic!
Thank you,
Tim
*ginormous real bear hugs*
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 09:46:33 PM AEST (User
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Taken back! I am overwhelmed by the extreme open honesty in your write here. I am sure this was very hard to put out. I know you stated that in your comments, but it is evident in your words within the piece.
As of late some of my favorite poets on this site have absolutely astounded me with the courage to rip from their depths. I cannot remember a time when I have been so surprisingly humbled by the choices in reading I have found.
You people amaze me. Thank you for welcoming the reader into your worlds. I can not think of anything more engaging than open spirited poetry.
A SUPERIOR JOB!
My wishes that tings do not end the way you have stated here. You have my prayers and thoughts.
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 09:49:20 PM AEST (User
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I'm with Tim...what a briliant write. It was a "pull you in" poem. The beginning left me in awe....
This voice,
That tiptoes onto the page
And whispers in layers –
Picking up and putting down
Words with little pulleys –
Thank your for sharing this wonderfully bittersweet write with us. Peace, Laura
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:04:37 PM AEST (User
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Wow. Now this is powerful, and sad, and splendidly written. As a poem about the progression life takes us through, which is how I understand it to speak, it's deeply charged with meaning, worthy of the massive Advents that shape our days.
Well done, well done. |
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:53:26 PM AEST (User
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Oh Chris...
Posting this here, that shows that you are brave.
Now I knew what this is about, it makes it somehow harder to read.
I have told you what I think about this, but I just wanted to say on here, that you wrote this. You wrote it and it's wonderful and stunning and if it was written for me, I would be saying to myself, that woman there, she can do this.
You are strong, hun, and you're not alone, and you will keep your voice.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 11:19:19 PM AEST (User
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From the depths of your heart, its emotion at its rarest form. So many writes have made me feel something deep inside, that is what makes them special to me. Your a word artist, and you are strong, it shows throughout. Ill tuck you near my heart, lifting you up from a distance. If anyone can do what needs to be done it is you!
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 12:09:14 PM AEST (User
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i would think, like voices often do; perhaps it is more a change. maybe the tiptoey voice had caterpillar legs and it is just now growing wings.
i find cause to celebrate here, and reasons enough to beleive in silver linings.
D.Sapelo
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by ButchHoward on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 12:09:39 PM AEST (User
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Snemmy, my heart and my prayers go out to you and to your dearest friend. I am humbled by your poetic prowess, your loving heart and your courage. May God give you His strength to persevere through the days to come. I pray that His loving comfort will stand gaurd over your sweet soul -always.
Your friend,
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 05:26:11 PM AEST (User
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~*Snemmy*~
An outstanding deep, open and honest write. You have poured out ur utmost inner feelings in this write. You are a very brave and courageous person ~*Snemmy*~
You have made us feel ur emotions and that can only be done from a poet who is highly gifted and talented.
May ur days ahead always be bright and blest ~*Snemmy*~.
*big heartfelt hugs to my very special friend*
~*Suzie Q*~ |
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 09:55:53 PM AEST (User
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Not sure about the substance of this one - an ambiguous soliloquy about your muse, or alter ego? or a more corporeal mentor perhaps? Sounds to me like the former. Its a lovely, revealing piece though, giving me an insight into someone who remains so well protected and guarded, despite your number of posts.
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Saturday, 22nd April 2006 @ 07:46:09 AM AEST (User
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this was a terrific write... each line moved me more than the previous one..
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Re: In Anticipation of a Necessary Goodbye
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 03:36:43 PM AEST (User
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I read this,as to your muse but for me it ends with thoughts of my ageing mother.I guess we all read poems our own way.A wonderful write,you have such a deep and human touch to you writing that makes it,always, so very compelling,
Den |
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