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The Final Act
Contributed by
Craze
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Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 08:56:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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The curtain closes as I'm pricked by my own roses while this kid poses no one knows this
As his kiss of hope has vanished in this sinful smoke as he begins to choke
As something begins to poke and prod at my inner child who has grown weary
Mom can you still hear me
Everyone seems to fear me as I resort to god asking him to steer me into the right so I may bathe in the light
As this seems to be my last fight wondering if I should take flight or should I fight with all my might
This question begins to bother me like a rash as I feel like all my emotions are going to crash
And this looks like my last chance to jump out
As I find that i've lost this bout as i hit the ground and i'm down for the count
As I dismount from my life and focus in on my strife as I pick up the knife this is the way I deal with life
Copyright ©
Craze
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2006-04-19 08:56:34]
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Re: The Final Act
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by Lilbabe on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:37:57 PM AEST
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i think i just might like this one better than Nightmares of the Forgotten...but i love them both! i especially like the last line. i look forward to reading more of your poems...
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Re: The Final Act
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th June 2006 @ 01:42:40 PM AEST
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i am with lilbabe in thinking this might be a more preferred read. your line breaks here make it much easier to feel a rhythm. and i noticed the spelling seems much more paid attention too. i don't read much on cutting. i never did it myself, but you present it well and not real over graphic like.
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Re: The Final Act
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by Uncertain_Oblivion on
Friday, 20th October 2006 @ 11:50:30 AM AEST
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YES! I love this so bad....excellent work here, excellent work indeed!
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Re: The Final Act
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by SerenePsycho on
Sunday, 22nd October 2006 @ 01:19:25 PM AEST
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| Very well done. Excellent finish. Love this one more than the first part. Keep it up. |
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Re: The Final Act
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Friday, 12th January 2007 @ 09:02:55 AM AEST
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This was really good.. I liked the form and the flow.. I really love the last line.. It makes me think about myself.. Great job max..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: The Final Act
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by Craze on
Friday, 4th May 2007 @ 04:36:48 AM AEST
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listen this poem is nothing compared to my nightmares so you should read about them in my poem called nightmares of the forgotten
love always mopey |
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