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perfect feeling
Contributed by
hz1059
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Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 11:03:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Felling the breeze flowing through my hair. The sun is shining down on my body, warming it like fresh towels in the dryer. I can feel the blades of grass grazing my skin, it almost tickles. The leaves dance gracefully as the wind blows progressively from the summer’s sky down through the trees branches. Clouds move slowly making different shapes I let my imagination run wild hoping I can recognize something. I tell myself I could lay here forever in this hour I call bliss, but days come and go just like night turns to day and life to death. Soon it will rain and the rich blue sky will turn to a dark black haze, but maybe soon ill be able to appreciate the calm of the storm that burdens my soul.
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Re: perfect feeling
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 11:09:11 PM AEST
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rich in beautiful images. Soft and flowing write. You took me away for a moment.
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Re: perfect feeling
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by twick on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 12:25:48 AM AEST
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"The leaves dance gracefully as the wind blows progressively"
I love this part the most. It's not so much what's being said but the way it sounds when you say it. Gives a nice soft feeling. The ending though really puzzled me. It seems like you added something obsure and abstract in the last line so it doesn't really make sense with the rest of the poem. |
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Re: perfect feeling
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by Jackee_line on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 05:12:41 AM AEST
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| beautifully written |
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Re: perfect feeling
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by katt on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 09:41:51 AM AEST
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good imagery and descriptions. Enjoyed it.
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