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Stay a while?
Contributed by
Michael_Bevins
on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 05:49:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Baby, you've done it again
Cut yourself
Deep in the skin
Why did you do it?
I knew this would happen
Why did I tell you?
I know you're fighting with your mom
And baby I know you hate your stepfather Tom
But baby, look what they are doing to you
Ripping you apart
Breaking your heart
Honey i need you to stay here a while
I don't want you to walk that mile
Down the streets towards the dark
For that is the journey we all must embark
But now is not the time
Honey hear the church bells chime
I need you to stay with me
Please don't leave me here all alone
In this cold world of pain
Darkness falls
Betrayeth my pain
Let me die and scream in vain
Honey don't leave me, please don't go
Baby please I want you to know
I love you now as much as ever
Please we'll get through this together
Your loving heart, won't let you fall apart
Hatred hurts and I know your pain
Please honey won't you stay a while?
For, I need you to help me walk this lonely mile
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Michael_Bevins
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Re: Stay a while?
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by Dreama on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 06:05:05 AM AEST
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hey, sorry 2 hear that you and your girl are going thru a rough patch... it seems to me that you are asking her to stay for you.. in my experience i've found that people with troubles require support, not more pressure, so you could let her know that 'no matter what' you will always love her..
nice job on the rhymes and stanzas.. keep up the writing.. Pete |
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Re: Stay a while?
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 12:26:26 PM AEST
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wow this is a very heart felt write.. i can feel the sadness.. hang in there.. try to talk to your gf.. get help now cuz cutting is bad and can get worse.. I hope it all gets better.. nice write though.. very sad.. thanks for sharing
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Re: Stay a while?
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by oreo910 on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 12:39:31 PM AEST
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AMAZING!! I know wat ur goin through. 1nc had a b/f that was suicidial. Thank god he didn't do n-e-thing serious. I think u'll go far wit the writtin! Keep it up!! GO YOU!!
-Arianna P.s. I hope u guys get through this! |
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Re: Stay a while?
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by katt on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 01:27:21 PM AEST
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This poem tore at my heart. So much emotion and pain. Well written and a good read. Great job!
katt |
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Re: Stay a while?
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 02:15:54 PM AEST
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| This is not bad. I rewrote your version and posted it -I hope you don't mind. You have a very good writing style that is worth reading. This poem seemed to have someone in mind and i hope she likes it. Good job. |
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