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Strangers
Contributed by
Gigi_15
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Sunday, 16th April 2006 @ 11:12:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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Cold, that is how it feels now
Safe, is how I once felt
The more time passes
The more we seperate
Day by day
They become less
The people I once called friends
Are now strangers to me
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Gigi_15
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2006-04-16 23:12:41]
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Re: Strangers
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by Lady_Daisy on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 12:04:37 AM AEST
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A little too simple for my liking, a tip from me; learn how to elaborate. For example, why does it feel cold? Why are your friends so distant from you? Or visa versa. If the friendship is now cold, how about describing your friends as cold creatures of the night? Yes that’s what it needs, more description! I hope I have helped you in some way or another. =)
LD.
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Re: Strangers
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by Gigi_15 on
Monday, 17th April 2006 @ 02:35:38 PM AEST
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| i wanted it to be simple:) since i usually do everything you just told me:)..for once..i wanted to stay a mystery..for u to ask urself..cold how.etc..:) |
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