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Frown
Contributed by
aegurly
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Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 12:05:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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What goes up,
Must come down!
What was a smile,
Is now a frown!
I'm falling apart,
Since you broke my heart!
I really need you,
After all I've been through!
I cryed myself dry,
When you said your goodbyes!
I really need you back,
before I crack!
I loved you inside,
But I didn't claim,
Because you didn't feel the same!
I know this sounds lame,
But all I want is for my heart to be put back into,
And for us to be together again because I really love you!!!
Copyright ©
aegurly
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2006-04-14 00:05:11]
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Re: Frown
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by aegurly on
Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 03:05:24 PM AEST
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| will you please comment thanks!!!!! |
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Re: Frown
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by Lips on
Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 03:49:21 PM AEST
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| Gee someone really broke ya heart! Not a bad read at all |
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Re: Frown
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by marylou on
Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 08:24:20 PM AEST
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good poem raven keep it up
marylou |
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Re: Frown
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by BabiBoricua314 on
Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 11:37:30 PM AEST
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wow
that is very powerful
i went through something like that but, i did something i shoudnt have done.. ill give u a hint.. i lost it wen i waz 14 and im 15 now.. guess |
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Re: Frown
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by JGB on
Saturday, 15th April 2006 @ 12:34:32 AM AEST
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All of your poems are written with such feeling. I'm sorry you feel so bad.
Your writing is good! I believe you have a future in writing!
Joanna
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Re: Frown
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by Gigi_15 on
Saturday, 15th April 2006 @ 03:39:59 PM AEST
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| wow..this is a very awesome poem i like the way it rhymes..and i thought it's kinda cute and also sad:(:( i hope he'll come back ..btw thank u for the comment:D |
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Re: Frown
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Saturday, 15th April 2006 @ 09:39:58 PM AEST
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| The whole poem was beautiful expect the ending stanza. Maybe delete it or rewrite it. Good write! I really liked this one.^_^ |
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Re: Frown
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by bigduck6769 on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 07:45:23 AM AEST
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i agree with that last person who commented..
this is an amazing poem, but the end is predictable..
great write though..
=] |
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Re: Frown
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by Michael_Bevins on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 06:34:14 PM AEST
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| Amazing, Really enjoyed. Thank you. Keep up the great work ;) |
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