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I LOVE YOU
Contributed by
Michael_Bevins
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Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 04:42:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Even with my heart so cold
You always seem to turn it to gold
I never knew i could feel this way
Loving you more each and every day
I never thought I could be so happy
But you have sure proven me wrong
I never knew it would hurt so bad
Being away from you i feel so sad
With every kiss
I feel im in total bliss
When i look up at the stars
I cant help but feel all my scars
Then im reminded
That someone really does care
You have no clue how good it feels
Knowing some one will always be there
When you smile i feel happy
And when you frown it brings me down
even when were not together
It seems i can still feel your every emotion
This strange connection we have
It might be odd but im glad its there
I guess what im trying to say
Is im with you in every way
And when you feel down
Just know that im here
Loving you o so much my dear
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Re: I LOVE YOU
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by jada on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 09:10:07 PM AEST
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| it was ok. i liked it but i didn't feel any emotion in the one .good write though |
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Re: I LOVE YOU
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by twick on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 10:42:30 PM AEST
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| I liked the one before this one better. This sounded like you were more concerned about the rhyme that with the content. It's still good though but I think it could be better. |
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Re: I LOVE YOU
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by Michael_Bevins on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 10:44:48 PM AEST
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| Yea, I gota work on putting emotion into words lol. o well ill get there. |
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Re: I LOVE YOU
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by Lilly-Quill on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 10:47:08 PM AEST
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Friedrich Nietzsche once said, “When entering into a marriage one ought to ask oneself: do you believe you are going to enjoy talking with this woman up into your old age? Everything else in marriage is transitory, but most of the time you are together will be devoted to conversation.” Consequently, it sounds to me as if you're off to a great start (for companionship of the heart).
Enchantingly endearing!
~Lilly-Quill
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Re: I LOVE YOU
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by Archie on
Tuesday, 25th April 2006 @ 01:57:01 PM AEST
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| Try writing music instead that will help sing your poems to yourself. The first stanza was the best stanza in this poem in the others you lost your rhythym. If you can keep your rhythym them the rest will fall into place. |
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