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No Joke
Contributed by
bigduck6769
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Tuesday, 11th April 2006 @ 03:26:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Pot smokin'
laughin' and chokin'
stayin' up all nite tokin'
when you fall asleep, you cant be woke, n'
you spend all your money on it, so your always broke, n'
your mouth is so dry you could suck down a 3 liter coke, n'
you think you will be doin' it til the day that you croak, n'
when your high, you just let everything soak in,
it seems like your mind is so open,
and there is nothing you cant figure out. your a genius and you know it
until you get behind the wheel with a friend who is toasted,
"i can drive like a champ when im messed up" he has always boasted
but this time, yall ran off the road, n'
you hit a tree and got knocked out cold, n'
you wake up in the hospital with every bone in your face broken,
you cant even lift you left arm to your throat, n'
your mom tells you that its a trachea makin' you cough and choke, n'
you start rehab the next day, and its the hardest thing you ever did, n'
you hope its a dream, but this isnt a joke, n'
you realize that no amount of smokin',
no drinkin', no pills, is worth goin' through rehab again
so you make a commitment right then to let it all go, n'
all of your friends are still hittin' the dope, n'
you dont wanna be around it, but you dont let them know it,
you wish they would stop but you dont ever show it
you just hope and pray to God that one day, they outgrow it.
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Re: No Joke
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by Mild_Tempest on
Tuesday, 11th April 2006 @ 04:04:09 PM AEST
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| Fast paced, short, interesting rhyme. Sounds like a great poem with a great message with a great structure from a great poet. Good write. |
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Re: No Joke
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by freespirit on
Tuesday, 11th April 2006 @ 10:11:43 PM AEST
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I like this poem Im very much against any kind of drugs glad your ok and that you dont smoke pot any more maybe other young kids should read this pass the message to your friends God gave you a brain use it or you will loose it
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Re: No Joke
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 30th April 2006 @ 09:22:36 PM AEST
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~*Ryan*~
Sometimes we get carried away with the fast life. Going through the fast lane only stopping when it's too late. You're one of the lucky ones. You are very talented and ur work here is clear evidence of that. You've got alot of potential and I can see u getting far with ur writing. Keep at it ~*Ryan*~you have a bright future ahead of u.
*hugs galore*
~*suzie Q*~ |
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