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TEARS AT NIGHT
Contributed by
anthony
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Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 07:45:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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T_ears at night from feelings I fight.
E_xpressing them is right.unable to recite, but it is what i want. Not
A_ble to talk. Knowing somthing needs to be said.But its blocked
R_elizing as i lay in my bed with tears of regret again. I
S_hould of spoke, even if it seemed like a joke(nothing)
all of which equals somthing.
A_wake at night feeling alone in thought.(running)
T_ough to take so many things pile up.
Like leaves in the fall I need a rake.
N_oticing a few that create hate.
I_nside I search for the root of my evil.
G_iving you an explanation for sadness, I ask myself
H_ow? If I don't know exactly what? It's unknown like
T_he anchor on an out of control chain dropping into the abyss of life taking my ship below.
Copyright ©
anthony
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2006-04-08 07:45:56]
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Re: TEARS AT NIGHT
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 09:44:21 AM AEST
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Nice attempt of an Acrostic.....
Youe spelling needs checking..maybe you can click "yes" to have your poem edited for spelling...
Keep writing.
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Re: TEARS AT NIGHT
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 09:57:56 AM AEST
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well written, you should spell check a bit more, but then I often forget to as well.
The vertical down message is cool, but in my opinion
1 the hidden message should be hidden, it feels more like a gimmick when you actually space it and make it obvious
2 The message itself should not be the title of the poem.
Overall a good write. keep writing.
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Re: TEARS AT NIGHT
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by Lilly-Quill on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 04:15:13 PM AEST
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| This is a very well written muse. Good job. |
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