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Rock (No Hiding Place)
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:13:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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Is it petty, I wonder…
The package of perpetual irritants
That I seem to continually lay down…
The litany of minor lamentations,
Unwrapped from tin foil
And set out on the blanket
Before you… again, again.
I wonder if it bothers you, asking
On occasion if it does – only
To lose your answer
Underneath the worry
That you might not know
Why my voice quivers so
Everytime I do.
So, I ask again,
And then…
Again, I worry
That I’m
Burdening you.
~ ~ ~
Before a rock, by a river, ‘neath a tree –
A picnic of my burdens,
You,
Me…
Singing, still,
That same old song
As time… rolls… on.
(Thank you)
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Silent-No-More
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:19:47 AM AEST
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For lack of better words, this is just simply ,quietly ,lovely and amazing. The level of depth in this write is tremendous,
well done
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:50:38 AM AEST
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*somehow...thinks that you'd never be a bruden*
That, simply put, is a beautiful poem, Snemmy.
Thank you,
Tim
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 06:36:22 AM AEST
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*thinks he sees the quality of the abovementioned stretch, and nods in agreement*
I like the way the words slow down, so to speak, as the poem rolls on toward its end, yet they pick up more sense and depth as they do. This is well done, o thou of the rambling crown, well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 01:32:35 PM AEST
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A lovely write, so insightful and meaningful.
Thats something I love about your work.
Your depth of meaning inside poetic words.
Michelle |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 12:42:03 AM AEST
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I had this big praising speech, then I realized I have given you them before, and they probably are beginning to sound the same. So instead of the great big paragraph full of different words that mean the same thing the last several comments I made on your work did. I will simply state. See your other works that I have commented on. You always leave me captivated!
MARVELOUS!
SCM |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by JGB on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 04:35:48 PM AEST
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It's not a stretch, it's the right category and believe it or not it gave me chills and I'm not sure why.
It's just where it needs to be. |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 10:15:09 AM AEST
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I really like the image of a picnic, used so effectively in dealing with concerns and apprehensions covered and wrapped in one's "basket." The underneath (underlying) worries and uncertainties very effectively conveyed; and all of nature (one's spirit) portrayed....maybe this is a reach?
Very well done, Snemmy
Will
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th April 2006 @ 09:18:50 AM AEST
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I have my ideas but they are just ideas,as to what the rock,the river and the tree may symbolise ,at the picnic of life,where we may open our burdens.Petty as we may think they appear,I'm sure to whom you speak,does not see it that way.To feel spiritually that burdens are considered,is a blessing,which I'm sure your 'Thank you' recognises.
Never do you get it wrong,another absorbing write,
Den |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by Archie on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 01:45:00 PM AEST
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You are welcome if you are thanking me for reading this. I read some 2 to 5 poems when i come on site and i must say this is a poem i have enjoyed very much.
I do not think it is a burden to read and share thoughts and opinions with another.
I am ofcourse limiting my answers to my own views and to another reader this poem may well say something different. |
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Re: Rock (No Hiding Place)
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 14th April 2006 @ 01:46:25 PM AEST
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Not petty at all my dear
Is inviting, and I hear........
your thank you too
Not necessary for you!
So nice to hear from you
and thank you for your splendid comment
Warm love
consue
I thought your writing was great! |
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