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At least once
Contributed by
Kimberlynn
on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 08:06:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Every cloud has a golden lining
Every person has a good side deep, deep down
And if you take the time too see them (at least just once)
It’s a much more beautiful world
I know, after all, it’s a rotten place
People are rude and selfish
And don’t give a care
But everyone has a good trait, even if its only one
Everyone’s been nice at least once
Every cloud has a gray spot
Every person’s been mean (At least once)
If you can see through them (See who they are)
You can see a better world
I know, after all, it’s a rotten place
People are rude and selfish
And don’t give a care
But everyone has a good trait, even if its only one
Everyone’s been nice at least once
Something’s always wrong
Everyone has problems
But something’s always fine
Somewhere along the line (Of life)
Something’s alwas gone right
I know, after all, it’s a rotten place
People are rude and selfish
And don’t give a care
But everyone has a good trait (even if its only one)
Everyone’s been nice at least once
Everyone’s been nice at least once
Been nice at least once
Everyone’s been nice
Everyone’s been at least once
At least once
At least once
Copyright ©
Kimberlynn
... [
2006-04-04 20:06:42]
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Re: At least once
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 10:12:53 PM AEST
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I like this. It has a wishful note to it, and I think the repetition of 'at least once' was well done. Keep writing!
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Re: At least once
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 05:24:34 PM AEST
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| Okay, next to the last verse, last line: alwas = always. Sorry, I'm a stickler for smoothin' out bumps in a beautifully presented poem of optimism and hopefulness. Good work, K! |
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Re: At least once
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by Somnium on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 07:10:14 PM AEST
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I dont agree with the "wishful note" comment, this is true, and i wish more more people could see it!
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