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The Butterfly
Contributed by
whiteleo1984
on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 11:17:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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How can you fly so freely?
what special things do you possess?
haven't you struggled thru your journey?
wasn't you just like the rest?
but yet, thru all your transgressions
you made it
you came out of the lies
you came out of the deciet of the world
you came out beautiful...
You emerged as a new creature
with a new name
you fluttered thru the flowers and the trees
without a care
you go thru your life without worry
you just do your thing
you amaze people with your moves
you astonish those with your beauty
and you give a hope to those without one.
Of all of God's precious creatures,
you, my friend, are the best,
full of life and dreams
just giving your all...
And for this
all I can ever tell you is...
Keep going
with your beauty and grace
for all heads will turn
to see you free
and preciously alive
Copyright ©
whiteleo1984
... [
2006-04-02 23:17:25]
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Re: The Butterfly
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by Gigi_15 on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 11:40:41 PM AEST
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| This is a very nice poem:):) i think it;s cute in a way, and also, maybe something that you would want;)..for u to be that 'butterfly'..it might not be that hard..as it seems |
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Re: The Butterfly
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by jrod56 on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 11:51:46 PM AEST
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From a writers point of view you have very strong lines in this poem but then u seem to go shallow like the lines that follow arent strong enough i like the way u write just let it all come out deep and strong u got a
have good base of writing skills u just mix in not very strong lines with strong ones but overall good job |
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Re: The Butterfly
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by Alison on
Monday, 3rd April 2006 @ 01:22:04 AM AEST
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| very sweet and touching. u have a good point of view. great write. |
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