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Fall Away (Cold as the Tears He Cried)
Contributed by
MG_Akela22090
on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 06:31:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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And she cried to him, “Don’t leave me here! I need you by my side!” but he ignored her and walked straight out. She followed him, crying into the night, but he was gone, leaving her to die.
When daylight came, she lay broken in the corner, not a soul to care that she was bleeding on the floor. His voice still burned a hole into her heart and his face fading into black.
“Don’t leave me here!” she screamed into the silence, but he was gone and now she was dying…
Daylight came and he sat in his car. Tears streamed down his face, cold as the snowy morning, but he was as broken as the girl he left behind.
“Let me fall away. Let me die. What have I done? But I can’t go back now…” He said to himself. But her face was burned straight in his heart.
The car roared to life as he sped away into the daylight still cold inside from the last night.
And she cried away her life with her blood; her body broken on the floor. Her screams echoed all through the house…
“Let me fall away! Let me die tonight. What have I done? But I can’t go back now…” she had said before she died.
The car came squealing to a halt and he was bolting into the door, but she was gone, gone forevermore…
And he screamed, “Don’t leave me here! I need you by my side. Don’t leave me now, I love you so much.”
But she was cold, cold as the tears he cried.
“Let me fall away….let me fall away. Let me die tonight. What have I done? But I can’t go back now, can I?” he whispered to himself.
And she was cold, cold as the tears he cried.
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Re: Fall Away (Cold as the Tears He Cried)
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by SAT on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 07:26:35 PM AEST
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| I Love This Poem. It's One Of The Best I've Read. Nice HTML Image Reference Too. It's Really Amazing And Don't Let Anyone Ever Tell you Differently. |
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Re: Fall Away (Cold as the Tears He Cried)
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 10:02:09 PM AEST
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| this write is wonderful...something about...about the story..it captavates the reader....almost like that book that you just can't put down....when the world around you..."falls away" ...and you hear, see, or smell nothing but that story....amazing write..and i love the way it comes back to the theme of the story..."let me fall away....."....brilliant....simply brilliant...and the tears...."and she was cold, cold as the tears he cried."......you have talent...and it is screaming in this. thank you. |
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Re: Fall Away (Cold as the Tears He Cried)
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by purplestary on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 11:30:13 PM AEST
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| i find myself reading it again..there is just so much to this...so very much......"she cried away her life with her blood; her body broken on the floor."......*sigh*...who am i kidding...to quote the best parts of this...the peices that stand out the most would be to quote the whole thing....i am left speachless now....this is just so amazing...the best i've read in a long time...5 stars....i'd give it a billion stars if this site alowd it. |
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Re: Fall Away (Cold as the Tears He Cried)
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by caido on
Thursday, 30th March 2006 @ 12:43:42 AM AEST
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| An extremely amazing poem! You have a wonderful talent that no one else can take away. I felt what the story was about as if I was there, and that was me. An amazing poem, wonderfully written, congratulations, stick to your talent, it can make all your dreams come true, just look behond the light. |
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