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Lost
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 07:31:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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They stare with dead eyes,
Reaching out for someone
To reach out for them.
They stand, tall,
Stagnating in their own pride,
Not seeing how tiny they have become.
They sit, silent,
Wearing smiles as a disgiuse,
As they wait for another call.
.
A back is turned,
They do not see,
Another of their own,
Fall
He cries inside,
The bedroom door,
His reply is the click of the lock
They wait a day,
To see the sky,
And wait for the rain to drop
She helps the needy,
And in return,
They just ignore her sobs
The backs are turned,
They do not see,
Another of their own,
Is lost
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Re: Lost
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by drtylilsecret on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 08:10:41 PM AEST
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you're right, i have a hard time understanding exactly what this was about, but it was beautifully written, sad indeed.
~natalya |
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Re: Lost
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by TheKid on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 09:00:39 PM AEST
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| Not really sure the meaning behind it, but it is still nicely written and I enjoyed it |
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Re: Lost
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 10:16:10 PM AEST
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| Phil, wow this piece leaves me so sad and lonely feeling. My first thoughts when reading this ...was it about homeless persons, maybe those who must wait for a handup from another? It was filled with this deep longing it seems to "be someone". Probably way off, but enjoy a piece of poetry that leaves my mind chewing on something a bit. Wonderful write. Peace, Laura |
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Re: Lost
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by slogan on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 10:18:39 PM AEST
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| Wow great piece of poetry...jh |
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Re: Lost
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 11:25:14 PM AEST
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| philly, i must say it doesnt matter if i dont understand it, i love it. excellent work here, excellent. keep up the good work poetess =]. i like everything about this, so i cant just pick out any one thing. i think i shall read it again =] |
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Re: Lost
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 01:57:28 AM AEST
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Hmmmm...would it be wrong of me to say in some way I do understand it. Maybe it's just from my own perspective. I don't know for sure.
What I surely do know is that you are an awesome poet and the imagery is awesome; sad.
I also know that I really really enjoy reading your poetry and am never disappointed when I visit your page.
Thank you very much.
Tim
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Re: Lost
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by pixie on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 10:30:59 AM AEST
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this really sums up how I am feeling right now, my dad passed away on Thusday and I feel so lost, this was so well written as always,
hugs
pix xx |
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Re: Lost
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by MorningDove on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 12:53:55 PM AEST
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| Whatever thoughts you might have on it, the ambiquity of it gives us all a chance to glean our own meaning from it. From my life experience I see those lost in their world, not realizing or recognizing there are others like them. Also that those that are there to help and treat them also get lost in their lives too and at times are much like those in need. This is a splendid write, Philly, no matter the actual meaning. Love, Rita |
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Re: Lost
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by Loende on
Monday, 27th March 2006 @ 03:38:21 AM AEST
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Well, I'm not sure of YOUR interpretation of this, but in my own, I find that it is indeed a wonder, and so sad, that we move through life without seeing the cost around us. Maybe if we cared more about those that we encounter than ourselves then we would all be less Lost.
I find that I like what this made me look into, and I dare say, that Andrew and David are correct; you are indeed a kindred spirit. A smashing write and I look forward to more.
Be Well,
Loende |
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Re: Lost
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 07:54:32 PM AEST
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To me, this speaks of, well, everyone, at some point in their lives. The best of us are not foreign to these feelings, I think.
Powerful piece of work, and it speaks to the heart. That it's ambiguous makes it the more resonating, I feel, because it gives us the ability to make more of it, ourselves.
Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: Lost
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st March 2006 @ 06:11:00 PM AEST
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ooooh I love a mystery!
This is one of those you could read again and again and get a different meaning each time.
That's exactly what i enjoy about this piece it can be about whatever the reader chooses.
Well done.
J. |
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Re: Lost
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by EmptyGirl on
Thursday, 6th April 2006 @ 03:17:30 AM AEST
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| I think I'm becoming a fan of yours. :) I may not understand what this poem is about, but something about it reaches out to me and touches a very lonely place inside. What an amazing talent you have. Thanks :) |
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Re: Lost
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th May 2006 @ 10:29:10 AM AEST
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Very thought provoking...and...shamefull.
A very impressive write Phyllis, a diffrent kind of deep for you. |
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