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heartless mistake
Contributed by
kiela_Rox_mi_Socks
on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 11:04:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
political
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3-24-2006
There isn't a wall...
I've suddenly lost it all...
Heartache sits heavy on my soul...
How come I'm never compeletly whole?
These tears that i cry are all for you...
Somehow you hurt me like you swore you wouldnt do...
I'm alone and im terrified thats true...
One look at my wrists and so are you.
Don't crowd my breathing space...
You stood there lying straight to my face...
You took the best of my soul with you...
I'm so angry there isn't fair.
Why do i hate you and yet not at all...
You promised to catch me and break my fall...
I'm standing here screaming in all of my pain...
You cant see my tears cuz they're washed by the rain.
Stepped on by memories all the time...
This was a shame an unsteady try...
Love should be unforgiving crime...
I look out the window I let out a sigh.
I finger this trigger from the gun in my hand...
I'm powerless to stop this and too weak to stand...
I cock back the safety as i begin to shake...
Finally im breaking theres nothing left to take.
© Care S. & Ashli M.
Copyright ©
kiela_Rox_mi_Socks
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2006-03-24 23:04:12]
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Re: heartless mistake
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 11:42:38 PM AEST
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oh wow, really great write, the pain becomes very apparant. and i'm assuming it was a mistake that it was placed under "political poetry"...
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Re: heartless mistake
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 08:20:58 PM AEST
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Wow this was powerful, yet very sad. I loved
the emotion in this poem you forced the
reader to feel what the person in your poem
was feeling. Also, the ending to this poem is
amazing. I don't think I've ever read an ending
like that before in a suicide poem. Great job
Care! Thanks for sharing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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