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Unpeel Me
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 08:10:32 PM in AEST
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Don't give me no more
of your man-made chemical
Solutions. (?!)
NO Pharmies
to contain me
to supposedly
substain me
You're making me a zombie
taking control of a battered mind
keep looking at me insanely
inanely
Please....Please don't restrain me
in your world of white
I know you want to stone me
debone me
leave me in a gelatinous state
to vegetate
dissipate
in your false world
I simply hate
I'm so tired these days
lumbering about in a medicated maze
Choked in the haze
of ancient skys
with blackened rays
deep set eyes
see only a glimpse of the
horrors that lie beneath
So...
Unpeel me...
If you please.
Penned March 2006
Laura Horner
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by holderofthestone on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 09:43:11 PM AEST
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| i like this alot, seems almost like it could be good song lyrics! nice write. |
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 11:47:20 PM AEST
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wow, tons of meaning behind it, really great write, absolutely loved it, did a great job of expressing it all.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 09:43:22 AM AEST
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| Very clever write.....Mike |
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by Willofree on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 03:48:16 PM AEST
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Laura,
I empathize with your frustration. Sometimes you must wonder if you are better off without all that medication. While it is the available treatment we sometimes get fed up with our options. I know how frustrated I get in dealing with Parkinson's.
Peace be with you, my friend. And remember you are worth the effort.
Will
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 04:34:31 PM AEST
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I really like the way you worded this. It has a nice musical and rhythmic flow to it.
I believe you speak the words so true of many people....or well, at least myself...you know...been there...done that.
*gives you a ginormous hug*
Very good write indeed.
Take care, my friend.
Tim
:-)
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by shelby on
Saturday, 25th March 2006 @ 05:28:35 PM AEST
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Incredible Laura! YOu spoke volumes with your flow and form . Yes I agree with this so much. I feel they grasp at anything not really looking at the outcome of things for the person taking the meds. I feel natural herbal ways are best in most cases. I hope your feeling better soon I hate to see you hurting and upset.
Super huggers
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th March 2006 @ 01:07:32 PM AEST
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Yeah that manmade crap certainly fries your brain! the meds I was put on for sleeping also (apparently) had anti pyschosis properties.
Anti-pyschosis my a*** they made me bloody worse I was almost at the howling at the moon stage (only the full ones mind)
Stick to the natural plant extract medication! that's what I say.
Great work Laura more people need to be made aware of the s*** they try to pump into people.
At the end of the day it's the easy way out for them, throw a load of pills at the problem.
J. |
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by Caged Soul on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 02:03:19 AM AEST
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This is really cool; so full of energy and you. I really liked the first part of the first stanza the most
You've got some real crazy skills
Ash~ |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 02:19:00 PM AEST
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pain lord that's what it's all about sister laura pills r we back iin the 60ts again? lol. i have 2 be careful with mine also so i don't OD. oh well great write. peace 2u my sister.
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by lovingcritters on
Friday, 31st March 2006 @ 04:08:24 PM AEST
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How very creative of you! And Bless your heart for telling it so true!
I have a dear friend in the hospital Laura, and she doesn't even have "Sugar" and because her sugar was over 150 they were going to give her an insulin shot! Can you imagine. Hospitals are like wars these days.......get in and get out before they kill you!
My sentiments exactly. I'm 69 without any meds at all..........good genes, but also good living!
This was marvelous!
Warm love
consue |
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by Spazzo on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 10:17:52 AM AEST
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A very great poem.
Take care.
Scott |
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 11:24:50 PM AEST
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Pray with and for your doctor. If he or she is not a believer, slam that door and go find yourself another one.. God works miracles, He can get you well fast.. can you see this type, if so, you know He saved me.. huggies..
raquelLeah |
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by Hautebush on
Saturday, 8th April 2006 @ 12:46:25 AM AEST
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Hello Hippienurse,
What great use of rhythm! I was snapping my fingers to the music of this poem. And its theme is so meaningful for all of us. How well we know the propensity of docs to give us a little pill and make us all better. But as you so vividly express that is not true. Just as there is poetry within you, there is also healing within you. However, this pain has made for a lovely poem. Hautebush |
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 11th April 2006 @ 11:21:17 AM AEST
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This was a great poem.. Loved the way that it was written..
Take care
christina |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 06:38:54 PM AEST
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Aw, Laura~
I feel ya in this. Truly. When my sister was medicated, (for just
about any and everything), I wanted to scream at the world.
She was not herself . . . there has got to be a better way.
As for the piece, it was exceptional! You have a talent for getting
across exactly what you want to say, [or at least that's how it
appears to me.] Powerful, these words written!
*peace*
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by joydeep_nath on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 03:04:04 AM AEST
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| good...well captured |
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 19th April 2006 @ 10:36:06 AM AEST
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You have said it so well....
I hope you feel better real soon.. so you can get off that medication..
Jenni |
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by JGB on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 12:54:17 AM AEST
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Good write. I don't know what to say.
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by Archie on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 08:28:17 AM AEST
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| This is a good write. I can relate to this in a lot of ways. |
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by Tiffyo4 on
Friday, 28th April 2006 @ 01:26:51 PM AEST
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i know the feeling you feel very well i have to take meds to for the same stuff you have and it sucks but it gets better
Tiff |
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by emystar on
Monday, 29th May 2006 @ 01:37:33 AM AEST
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If u eva got on the right meds u wouldn't mind.
The day a dr. put me on Zooloft was one of my best days eva.
I have no side effects an the only way I know I'm taking is the anxiety attacks aren't there much at all.
Good writing as always,
emy
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 12:46:38 PM AEST
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Great job here Laura!! The emotion is so fiercely strong in your words, and I just love the style in which this is written, and the flow!
Stick it to the man sister!!!!!!!
Scorp ; ) |
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Re: Unpeel Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 04:06:15 PM AEST
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| Just went to the Doc for inner ear infection; gave me antibiotic ear drops, pain relieiving ear drops, antibiotic capsules and blood pressure at 180/110 and wanted to give me bp lowering medicine. Said no thanks to the bp stuff, I'll take care of it NATURALLY, if you please! Right on write, laura. |
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by Lionel on
Saturday, 15th July 2006 @ 04:18:03 PM AEST
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You're so poetic. I love your manner of rhyme.
- and I hope they don't peel you: (If they do - I'll boohoo) before you get through, with your menu, of what you do, - so we can enjoy it too. Yahoo.
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