|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
One Heart Breaks
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 01:32:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
|
See how fast
One heart breaks
See how little time it takes
One false step
One small lie
Fragile love can quickly die
In a flash
It is gone
One more star you wished upon
Fades to dark
Out of sight
One heart breaks alone tonight
Should I search for deeper meaning
in this latest love charade?
Maybe something strong and noble,
from this mess, could still be made
Should I rise above the moment?
Try to see beyond the pain?
So damned hard to find the rainbow
When you're blinded by the rain...
See how little
Time it takes
See how fast this one heart breaks
Fragile love
Can quickly die
From one false step and one small lie
One more star
You wished upon
Gave a flash and then was gone
One heart breaks
Out of sight
In the dark, alone tonight
L. Carling c2006
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
... [
2006-03-23 01:32:28]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 07:55:13 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Damn, Larry.
This is hearbreaker, truly.
I adore this stanza:
Should I rise above the moment?
Try to see beyond the pain?
So damned hard to find the rainbow
When you're blinded by the rain...
Those last two lines took my breath away, and gosh, don't they just say it all.
*hugs Larry* I'm sorry that you are feeling so bad, but heck, you have such a way with words that I am thinking there is still a good side to it all.
I love the style of this, the way you change stanzas and lines half way through and the repetetiveness... It all adds up to a fabulous poem.
I hope you feel better soon, and a happy poem next time, yeah? ;)
Great write,
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by NoSaint on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 10:30:19 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
((((Larry))))
Lonely heartbreak portrayed with a soft melody
Shari |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by shelby on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 10:41:05 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
very sad Larry hope your ok
Michelle |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by MorningDove on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 02:20:01 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wish you love and happiness and that this is only a poem, not a part of your life.
This could truly be lyrics to a song. As I was reading I thought 'wow', now he is writing lyrics too. I see it is a poem now, but it truly could be a song.
Rita |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 11:34:10 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Brilliant, dark, and filled with torment. I have
no doubt though of your ability to rise above
your current pain. You have my e-mail
address so feel free to e-mail me if you are
feeling down (or even just to say hi). I may not
have the words to ease your pain but
sometimes just getting the words out can be
a healing balm. Keep up the writing bro.
Bobo (Joel) |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 09:25:13 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| So much said with so few words. Great write Larry.........Mike |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 12:13:11 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
A sad lament, beautifully portrayed. Such an eloquent mastery of the word you demonstrate.... heartfelt and gentle, albeit a lot of pain. If this indeed is your sad state, at least you can express it, which can help with t he healing.
Take care my friend, well done
Will |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by darkangeleyes57 on
Thursday, 27th April 2006 @ 10:45:02 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This was an amazing poem.. It was so deep and full of sadness and truth.. Heartbreaks are hard and this was a great poem..
take care
christina |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by Spike on
Thursday, 11th May 2006 @ 06:56:21 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
So many good comments already, that mine would be repetitive, I'm sure. beautiful and austere in its pain and regret.
Spike |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by blueheart on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 11:53:15 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Larry, I've missed your poetry. An awesome write. Truly touched my heart.
~Hanna |
|
|
Re: One Heart Breaks
(User Rating: 1 )
by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 31st March 2007 @ 01:59:07 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
In the blink of an eye love is gone. You sure know how to write with a golden pen
Wonderful
Love Angelxx |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
