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I scream
Contributed by
xXxmegsxXx
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Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 03:38:15 PM in AEST
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I want to scream and yell
At the top of my voice
I don't want to live
But I've got no choice
I'm in a catch twenty-two
There's no way out
So I just scream
Yell and shout
Alive I hurt my friends
But dying will do that too
There's no escape
I don't know what to do
So I scream and yell
At the top of my voice
I don't want to live
But I've got no choice
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Re: I scream
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by chaos78 on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 04:47:41 PM AEST
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| there always a choice but it better to live,good write |
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Re: I scream
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by moses on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 05:29:42 PM AEST
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My poetry roots stem from rap, and theres a song by Shyne called Martyr where the chorus goes: if you had a choice: life or death..what would u choose?
A lot of people feel the way you do, choose life, stick with it, you'll get through it in the end.
Keep it up,
-moses |
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Re: I scream
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 05:55:56 PM AEST
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I agree with the others. There is always a choice.
You can make your life better, I know you can. I did it, I know others who have. Just stay strong, you'll get through it.
I do think the poem is slightly to repetetive. You use lot of the same lines twice, and it makes the poem appear unfinished.
I do think it worked pretty well, though.
Anyway, good write.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: I scream
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by PhantomVampyress on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 09:44:04 PM AEST
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this is a very powerful felt write.. sounds like your frustrated.. things will get better though.. things always change for the better some things take longer than others but your time will come.. good write though,
JENNI |
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Re: I scream
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by twick on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 03:11:06 AM AEST
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how's this for a title:
tangled by puppet strings |
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