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Spring
Contributed by
Man_On_High
on
Tuesday, 21st March 2006 @ 11:46:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Above the
antiseptic scent
trailing from the kitchen,
Spring assails my senses
and freshens my soul,
long schooled in
Winter.
Sparrows
for the working
man set up turmoil
in the undergrowth, an
out-of-bounds raven
lords the sky
above
neighboring
chimney stacks,
rooftops and the like.
I know Spring has
come home, not
by the sight
of bud or
sound
of
bird,
but that
my heart
wakes from
solitude, leaping
from anguish
to meet the
coming
day.
Billy
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Re: Spring
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st March 2006 @ 11:50:05 PM AEST
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I love the way you've structured this and the images you throw up i.e
Sparrows
for the working
man set up turmoil
in the undergrowth, an
out-of-bounds raven
lords the sky
above
neighboring
chimney stacks,
You haven't just focused on the natural world of spring but the human aspect too.
Very well written Billy.
J.
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Re: Spring
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 12:14:22 AM AEST
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Your inner souls response to Spring is non less than exciting. Whereas I see Spring as the onset of a hot, harsh grueling Summer. This is splendidly done. Hurrah for your Springtime, Billy, Hurrah!
Rita |
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Re: Spring
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 03:18:49 AM AEST
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I agree with johnny and mommy rita.
This write is so awsome. :) |
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Re: Spring
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 02:47:40 PM AEST
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| Great write Billy...so very soulful. Indeed, spring is here. Peace my friend, Laura |
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Re: Spring
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 04:21:46 PM AEST
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Beautifull write.
We had hihg temperatures here during the Winter and now that it's Spring we have cold weather.
That's Arkansas weather. We have a saying if u don't like the weather stick around it will change.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Spring
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by Mangos on
Wednesday, 22nd March 2006 @ 07:37:19 PM AEST
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Sounds like you were reading my mind.
Nice work as usual
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Re: Spring
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd March 2006 @ 12:16:58 AM AEST
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What a lovely expression of spring. I love the spring as well, everything is new again and alive with color and warmth, well done!
LG |
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Re: Spring
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 27th March 2006 @ 08:10:39 PM AEST
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You shame my effort good sir! lol
[kidding]
Billy, this was splendid. Emotion filled words, so beautifully
evocative. I especially love the way you chose to display this.
Humbled . . . again.
~Breezy |
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Re: Spring
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 29th March 2006 @ 07:32:46 PM AEST
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~*Billy*~
You are a very creative and talented writer. Each time I have visited ur pages I am have always been impressed with its contents. Each one of ur writes tells a story. You're always trying something new and different. I like that alot in a writer. It says alot about them.
Spring, ah yes, one hearts plays a different note does it not?
Well done, brilliant as always.
*love n hugs*
~*sue*~ |
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Re: Spring
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by wizard on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 07:38:44 PM AEST
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awesome write bro...cant believe how many of these i havent commented on...i could have sworn i did comment on this...anyway...great descriptions in this...i love it.
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