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Deadly Camels
Contributed by
UnmovedMover
on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 08:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Camels spit in my face.
A sad, slow, death with no grace.
Left with a small cash settlement.
But no Dad to provide betterment.
The Doctor said there was time,
Time for one last goodbye.
My Dad hairless and anemic,
Cried of that Camels crime.
Entropy will overcome,
As surely as babies suck their thumbs,
never heed the warnings,
sucking cigarette smoke into lungs.
Dying for no reason,
living only for nicotine,
craving for that pleasing,
leaf of dark green.
I know Camels can spit.
It makes my fathers lungs bleed.
My father’s tombstone reads,
“Beware the Camels spit.”
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2006-03-16 20:00:00]
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Re: Deadly Camels
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by Ineedanap on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 08:06:26 PM AEST
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| Wow, that was really amazing. Honestly, that should be published! I'm kinda in awe, great write! |
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Re: Deadly Camels
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by thesinner on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 08:24:26 PM AEST
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| That was really great. Sad but, Excellent and moving. |
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Re: Deadly Camels
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by Jane_Doe on
Thursday, 16th March 2006 @ 10:36:56 PM AEST
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| This was so heartfelt and sad, but so brittle and honest. I loved it, and the last line was so powerful. |
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