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The murdered mouths of love
Contributed by
iodinelove
on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 08:58:16 PM in AEST
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We fell
A white
rice wine
suffering our tongues
to twist and tie
the truth
I had a friend
long years ahead
graying thin
and bled
of all his joy
He wrote to me
with words
that I have
never said
and spoke to me
of things
that I have
never read
He told me once
that truth is...
is the truest thing
i said
He told me once
that truth is
often dead
in the murdered
mouths of love.
We sat and watched
the Arizona sky
the bright light blue
and white rice wine
spinning into view.
He sipped he dripped
he curled and cried
I sipped and watched
the ground collide
with clear dry
scratches
and an empty mans tears.
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iodinelove
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2006-03-14 20:58:16]
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Re: The murdered mouths of love
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 09:03:36 PM AEST
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As for me, I think this one of your finest. Dare I say it's "throbbing" with meaning? It really is a moving, thoughtful and rather sad, very well-written, piece of work.
Get over that pain quick, eh?
Andrew |
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Re: The murdered mouths of love
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by drtylilsecret on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 09:03:57 PM AEST
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whoa, that was fantastic. murdered mouths of love? ingenious.
He sipped he dripped
he curled and cried
I sipped and watched
the ground collide
omg i loved it.
~natalya |
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Re: The murdered mouths of love
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 11:15:38 PM AEST
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| I loved this write....I'm with Natalya...that last stanza was the bomb. Very well written. Peace, Laura (hope all is well with the oral trouble soon) |
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Re: The murdered mouths of love
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by twick on
Wednesday, 15th March 2006 @ 04:44:13 PM AEST
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| i really liked this a lot, something different from most of the stuff I've read here. Plus I love alliteration, murdered mouths, golden! |
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