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Lift
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:10:45 PM in AEST
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I want the veil to lift away,
And reveal through darkness,
That the sun stills shines,
No matter how cloudy the day.
I want to feel the air on my face;
And the wind to carry me away,
Lift the gauze before my eyes,
So I can see through more than gray.
I'll pull these bindings from my skin,
And learn to take another breath,
Inhale hope once again,
For once it is gone, I have nothing left.
I'll raise myself out from the dark,
And try to heal my heart,
For though it broke once again,
Each day's a brand new start.
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Re: Lift
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by moses on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:15:51 PM AEST
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I like it a lot...the title fits. I know where you're coming from. Well done, everyday is a new start and I have to remind myself of that a lot.
Keep it up,
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Re: Lift
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by drtylilsecret on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:17:13 PM AEST
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gloomy, but wow, absolutel beautiful write. i loved it, and good luck with the brand new start.
~natalya |
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Re: Lift
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:18:25 PM AEST
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Sweet Phil,
It's funny how I can read your poetry ... and then read it again
when you've posted and it seems all new to me. Like I'm seeing
it for the first time! I love how your writes can do that to me.
This was a sad and despondent write, but has a kind of
'lift' at the end. (I think the title is perfect, actually upon
further examination).
It's wonderful how your writes always invoke the emotions from
within to rise to the surface ... like the comfort of a friend.
I dunno ... probably not making much sense.
*hugs and all that jazz*
~Breezy
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Re: Lift
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 07:42:45 PM AEST
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I'll bet there are more people that can and will relate to this better than you know. I certainly can.
"Inhale hope once again,
For once it is gone, I have nothing left."
Very true ... and accurate.
I enjoyed this Phil. Very much.
Nazzy ~
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Re: Lift
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by stew777 on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 09:48:02 AM AEST
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I enjoyed the read, well written, good poetry.
food for thought?
WANT OR NEED.!
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Re: Lift
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 02:10:44 PM AEST
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I really, really like this one. I can feel the desperation in your pen, in your words.
Take care, ok? Smile...
David |
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Re: Lift
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 05:17:42 PM AEST
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Feeling this way myself lately.
I can sense the longing, the hope...and yes the sadness......oh so nicely done my friend. |
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Re: Lift
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Tuesday, 14th March 2006 @ 06:17:56 PM AEST
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Philly,
Truly a wonderful write. Yes oh yes, how I can understand these feelings. I think my favorite stanza would be the last, each day giving new hope.
Thank you,
~Shannon |
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Re: Lift
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th March 2006 @ 06:52:29 PM AEST
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Well what can I say? long time no read!
I've had a manic day today reading poetry instead of attempting to write it and getting P***** and this is up there with todays best in my eyes.
Great work.
J |
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Re: Lift
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by Willofree on
Friday, 24th March 2006 @ 11:09:04 AM AEST
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A moving and heartfelt write, and one I can certainly relate to as well. Yes, certainly keep hope alive.
Phil, just remember you are worth the effort!
Blessings, Will |
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