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Treading Water
Contributed by
DarkFaerie
on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 12:32:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I try so hard
To just keep
My head above water
I try to understand
What my heart
Is screaming at me
Somedays its gibberish
Lost in translation
Other days I see your face
Floating right out
Of my wounded grasp
I wish I could turn
Back dreaded time
So maybe I wasnt
Choaking in this sea
Of self-hate I created
It stretches for miles
Around my wounded form
It incompasses all
It makes me fight to live.
What I wouldnt give
To have you back
Just once again
Copyright ©
DarkFaerie
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2006-03-12 12:32:40]
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Re: Treading Water
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by holderofthestone on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 01:12:04 PM AEST
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| when one gets caught up in turbulent waters sometimes it hard to find your way out... look to your true friends for help, they are always there for you! very expressive write great job. I hope you find your life preserver... |
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Re: Treading Water
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 03:39:02 PM AEST
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That wrentching statement, ohhhh what we wouldn't give, and of course turning back the clock, do i hear you or do i hear you. A most powerful peice of poetry your heart speaking loud and clear and quite sincerely i might add. Beautiful write.
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Re: Treading Water
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by thesinner on
Sunday, 12th March 2006 @ 04:49:38 PM AEST
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| Your pain comes through so deeply.Great emotional write. |
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Re: Treading Water
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by wikedladi on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 12:37:46 AM AEST
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| Great write! the images are crystal clear! you've got alot of people who love you! We're here for you even if you think we arent. i love you alot! i'll try my best to keep you afloat! |
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Re: Treading Water
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by wikedladi on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 12:37:47 AM AEST
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| Great write! the images are crystal clear! you've got alot of people who love you! We're here for you even if you think we arent. i love you alot! i'll try my best to keep you afloat! |
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Re: Treading Water
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by moses on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 05:53:31 PM AEST
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I was tryin to say a similar idea in one of my poems. Sometimes everything just consumes you. Well done, liked it alot.
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