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untitled
Contributed by
Castinova
on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 03:49:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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Slender beams of accusation
enter this darkened chamber
as I kneal
always forlorn
always cold
frozen here
waiting.
Haloed forms wrought in panes of glass loom
as dust dances in
the air
forming an image in my mind
sparing not my
naked soul.
Paleness on an angel's face.
I raise my head now
crying out against
this callous fate.
Copyright ©
Castinova
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2006-03-07 15:49:59]
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Re: untitled
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by lostrelic on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 04:01:38 PM AEST
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| a interesting write i like it |
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Re: untitled
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 04:37:20 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC..... interesting indeed...
ps..."kneal" should be kneel...(line 3)
Jenni |
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Re: untitled
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by thesinner on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 04:54:58 PM AEST
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| good work! |
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Re: untitled
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 06:31:43 PM AEST
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| So much potential here. The forced ryhme of "face" and "fate" took something away from the piece, though. Look forward to more. |
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