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Switerland's foothold on the illogical battlefield of loyalty
Contributed by
twick
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Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 06:05:14 PM in AEST
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has the **** hit the fan
has it ruined all the plans
has it taken something from you
was it hope, was it supposed to
feel this way everyday
I'm just wondering,
are you healing?
will that account for the absence
I'm outside the door
checking with a knock
you still there?
do you not care?
oh you do, you're supposed to
but then I think (it comes naturally)
about everything
and I know someting is amiss
I don't know if I want to be a party to this
but I got your back
I made the oath, there's still hope
you can be "hopelessly hopeful that I'm hopeless enough"
standing, maybe not understanding what
lies beneath caught underneath the lights
But I'll be here in the same spot through the fight
I wouldn't pretend to be anyone's best friend
and I write this with an honest heart
Those words (said) I will not let them leave any scars.
Copyright ©
twick
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2006-03-06 18:05:14]
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Re: Switerland's foothold on the illogical battlefield of loyalty
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by Ineedanap on
Tuesday, 7th March 2006 @ 08:39:41 PM AEST
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| Great write, and i understood it, but i think it was a little hard to comprehend. It seemed like you danced around your words and you couldn't pin-point anything. Nonetheless, i liked it. ;-) |
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Re: Switerland's foothold on the illogical battlefield of loyalty
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by trini on
Monday, 3rd April 2006 @ 06:31:28 PM AEST
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Heh. the title intrigued me.
Another great write from twick. Just looking around your site... expect more comments from me. Overall the feeling in this was a bit scattered, but your point was strongly made. i liked the obsecurity. Nice work
-Trini
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Re: Switerland's foothold on the illogical battlefield of loyalty
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by EvaLastingRose on
Tuesday, 4th April 2006 @ 03:34:15 PM AEST
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yea i understand wut u mean amazing poem ur great at writing and putting it together, strong title too...thx for reading my poems
oxox R.M. |
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