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The sancitty of a soul
Contributed by
BSteel
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Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 04:29:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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I'm in this game as a mortal soul searcher,
mortal soul schorcher, inner flame torcher,
burns away the false portion,
beneath the skin, my blood burns,
casting neither judgment nor extortion,
beneath the ruins lays a fortune,
pure, no element does it conform with,
No fear or anxiety penetrate it,
it is beyond conciousness,
It is my soul I will hold against any encroachment,
I shall not change my ways,
to satisfy your misconceptions of the game,
misdirections to be saved,
I force my own direction towards the grave,
Glory to he?
***** that, glory to me and all that see,
the sanctity of one's soul,
in realtionship with anything that may be.
Copyright ©
BSteel
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2006-03-06 16:29:48]
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Re: The sancitty of a soul
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by worldsenigma on
Monday, 6th March 2006 @ 04:37:08 PM AEST
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you seem sorta angry where it says
"glory to he. **** that glory to me" although the bible says to glorify him, it doesnt mean can't glorify yourself. You are to view yourself as a king or queen. im glad you can see that. but putting anger towards god becuz he wishes to be glorified seems a bit hypocritical don't you think? |
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Re: The sancitty of a soul
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by PGreene on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 08:17:42 PM AEST
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i loved it! great poem! loved this --> "I'm in this game as a mortal soul searcher,
mortal soul schorcher, inner flame torcher" great 2 lines. great job |
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Re: The sancitty of a soul
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by TheSpiritx on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 09:01:32 PM AEST
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This is brash and abrupt... and it has a beat to it that can't be ignored. You'd do well to further explore this style of poetry - I think it suits you. I liked it and various parts stand out as particularly interesting.
TS |
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