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The Awful Truth
Contributed by
Drapes
on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 05:34:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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My eyes water
And my cheeks sting,
One hundred bees attacking at once.
From the pit of my stomach,
Too far down to imagine,
A poisonous rush
Slithers up my spine.
While a thousand crickets hop through my belly.
In my chest is a raging fire.
Caught in the flames
Is my shriveled heart.
My legs wobble,
There's an earthquake under my feet.
I can't see.
The colors and shapes
Are so meaningless.
My brain has shut down.
I can no longer
Interpret
The purpose to this life.
I've reconsidered
And broken my dreams.
I've been slapped in the face by reality.
Copyright ©
Drapes
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2006-03-03 17:34:53]
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by Ineedanap on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 06:35:50 PM AEST
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| Wow, emotiuonal and well written. Great poem. Great sense of imagery |
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 09:20:17 PM AEST
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this is very emotinal and I know where your coming from here (if this is about reality on your life that is) I enjoyed reading this and i liked the flow of it.. very powerful write
JENNI |
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 09:54:28 PM AEST
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oooh i loved it, only too true, i bet that's exactly what it'd feel like, so many people need a reality check...lol
~natalya |
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by Alison on
Saturday, 4th March 2006 @ 09:01:39 PM AEST
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| you did very well on get'n the reader into the feeling of this poem. wonderful job! |
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by Jenni_K on
Sunday, 5th March 2006 @ 08:14:24 PM AEST
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You have captured the moment so well....the moment of truth....
Well done..
Jenni |
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Re: The Awful Truth
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by moses on
Sunday, 5th March 2006 @ 09:34:17 PM AEST
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well done, liked it, lots of imagery. I too, understand what you're saying.
Nice job and keep it up,
moses |
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