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Glass Walls
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 11:04:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I'm climbing glass walls,
Searching for hand holds,
I know I won't find.
While my reflection watches impassively,
...Then laughs as I fall.
I slip and slide,
But still I try,
To reach the other side.
I'm scratching through the pane,
Ignoring all the pain,
From my fingers, bloody and raw.
I'm watching as the rain,
Writes my story on the glass,
In spider-like calligraphy.
It forms in pools at my feet,
... And I watch myself drown.
I try to break out from the dream,
The glass has shattered,
Inside of me,
Yet still I cannot escape.
Will someone teach me,
How to get past,
[These walls that my heart makes...]
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2006-02-28 23:04:14]
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 11:12:21 PM AEST
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Hun~
I adore this!! Truly. It pierces me in a way I can't explain. I feel
it deeply, hun.
Love the spider calligraphy reference.
That last line is so utterly relatable and wistful ...
*falls in love with piece*
~Breezy |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 02:38:12 AM AEST
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amazing write philly girl one of your best.
love and hugs |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by OzChick on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 03:29:34 AM AEST
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Great write Phil, I can relate to this. Excellent imagery, I like the way you've written this poem.
~Jenny~ |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 04:14:12 AM AEST
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awesome, i love it!
well done
Avalanche XoXo |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by twick on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 01:27:18 PM AEST
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I really liked this.
It was simply stated and stated well. |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 2nd March 2006 @ 01:05:05 PM AEST
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I like it. There's a few lines that blow me away, that I wish I'd written. Envy...
Anyway, take care, my friend. And smile!.
David |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Alison on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 12:14:43 AM AEST
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| It made me feel like I was the one on the glass wall...and well,...we all have something like that...walls in our hearts. It's awesome! |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 3rd March 2006 @ 12:51:52 AM AEST
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This is an absolutely brilliant write. The emotion, the imagery, and way it is written. I love the imagery of your reflection laughing and your "out of body" perspective as you watch yourself. You are definitely brilliant.
Thank you very much for sharing your emotion and your wonderful talent.
Tim
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Re: Glass Walls
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th March 2006 @ 11:12:27 PM AEST
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Very relatable...to many of us as well as myself.
It's amazing how often we feel trapped only to crumble and then struggle to put ourselves back together again.
Well felt my dear freind. |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 13th March 2006 @ 02:11:35 PM AEST
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| You write with such meaning and I luv this one, can relate to it also. xxxxx |
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Re: Glass Walls
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by silent on
Thursday, 24th August 2006 @ 08:26:36 PM AEST
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| Simple and imaginative. I think the whole thing is very good, if you want any negative comments maybe a bit more flow in last three lines, but nothing more than that. It is definately a 5/5 for sure, loved it. |
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