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Only a Dream
Contributed by
dh_guitarist
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Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 10:26:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I woke up early this morning
To get up and go to work
But things weren't going my way
So i decided to be a jerk
I stayed home to go gack to sleep
Because now its the only place that we can meet
Its only a dream
Its not real
I can't describe exactly how i feal
My heart is gone
Its been ripped out
My mind is shot
Its time to throw it out
This can't be happening to me
But its real or so it seems
This can't be happening to me
It can only be a Dream
I just talked to you on the phone last night
You lied when I asked you
You said everything was alright
Now you say that you have to go
Now I know what I needed to know
Its only a dream
Its not real
I can't describe exactly how I feal
My heart is gone
Its been ripped out
My mind is shot
Its time to throw it out
This can't be happening to me
But its real or so it seems
This can't be happening to me
It can only be a Dream
When I tried to talk to you
You only walked away
Is there anything I can say or do
Anything to make you stay
I am waking up now
I can feal it in my heart
I can see the light
But yet its still so dark.
Its not really a dream
It is for real
I can't describe exactly how I feal
My heart is gone
Its been ripped out
My heart is gone
Because you threw it out
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Re: Only a Dream
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by drtylilsecret on
Wednesday, 1st March 2006 @ 03:13:50 AM AEST
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the first stanza seems a bit childish, but other than that it was a really good...well sounded more like a song.
great writing, especially for your first post, keep it up
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Re: Only a Dream
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 12th April 2006 @ 10:21:17 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC.... the best poetry site on the net!!
I have to agree with natalya..The first stanza did seem a little jerky but it was an overall good poem.. and based on your name I take it you play the guitar!! So I am also assuming that this probably has a tune to accompany it..
Keep up the good work!!
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Re: Only a Dream
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by richcol7522 on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 01:42:33 AM AEST
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I can agree with the other comments. But I think that this would really make a good song. Keep up the good work.
Take care-
Rich |
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Re: Only a Dream
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by midian on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 04:50:36 AM AEST
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| Personally i agree with the first stanza being a tad childish but i think that is made up for by the emotion behind it. this would flow nicely as a song |
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