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Another Day
Contributed by
Bsteel
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Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 09:47:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Another Day
Trying to juggle jobs with my words,
Bridge gaps otherwise unheard, ravenous bird,
That has learned, never bite the hand that feeds you, so I’m gonna stay loyal,
Paint my soul red, white, and blue, but walking that fineline of singing the blues,
In an offnote key, the key is to never die for your beliefs, cause God only knows
Who’s spinning them, reading them on a sheet,
Angels laughing at the book of life,
Demons doing likewise,
Men come, Men die,
Some reach high, some lose, some win, some are broken from dreams of glory,
All characters in Gods book, an eternal story, were each page is held sacred,
And when you die you get to watch the latest play, as I play with words, trying to caress and curve, begging them to stay in my head, give me the nerves, to write them down,
They twist and twirl around as I beg them to stay so I can keep playing within a play,
Turn the page,
Another Day.
Copyright ©
Bsteel
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2006-02-27 21:47:35]
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Re: Another Day
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by funnyface on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 09:53:46 PM AEST
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good write leep on keeping on
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Re: Another Day
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by funnyface on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 09:57:09 PM AEST
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sorry about the misspelled word it should have been good write keep on keeping on
i have had a very disturbing day with bad news say a prayer for me thanks
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Re: Another Day
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by Ineedanap on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 10:43:19 PM AEST
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| Good write. Probly the best one i have read from you poetry wise. Keep it up. Just one criticism: work on your flow. If you want it to be choppy, work on the rhythym and create a repetitive, yet interesting beat. If not, make sure it's smooth. Feel it flow. Good write. Keep it uo. ;-) |
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Re: Another Day
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by shelby on
Tuesday, 28th February 2006 @ 11:01:45 AM AEST
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I love your style and anyone who puts emotions so deeply within their lines. YOu will be another new favorite of mine here. Im so glad that you came!
Michelle |
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